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The Forbidden Fruit
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The Forbidden Fruit |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
 The Forbidden Fruit Across sunny lands grew a special tree, Where the forbidden, red apple grows. Adam and Eve didn’t really believe, In wearing those things called clothes. The sun shone down on the big green tree, That was full of the red, apple fruit. When Eve picked one --an earthquake had begun, And a snake coiled up from the root. As they sat beneath the Eden tree, The evil serpent started to say, “Eat the fruit of the forbidden tree. --Go ahead. It’s really okay.” As Eve gave Adam a bite of the apple, Ominous clouds then covered the sky. A voice came booming down from the heavens “Your betrayal makes your Father cry.” Adam and Eve felt naked and bare So they covered their loins in fig leaves. They knew they’d done wrong by taking the apple, And would never again be thieves. ARCTIC WIND |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This, dear Michael, is a very charming version of the biblical tale. And like Eve, humans are still attracted to eat of forbidden fruits, how comes? Some lessons are hard to learn, it seems. Really very well done! Love, Margherita  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Michael, This is delightful. Alison |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi AW, this is so cute... yann |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
yes loved the way you decribed the tale of Adam and Eve Hope |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I enjoyed the read... chapter and verse. Regards OLIAS. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Arctic Wind, I find all of your poems a refreshing reading experience. I enjoyed your portrayal of this biblical story ~ and the humour that you slipped in there! May your poetic wind never stop blowing and blessing these blue pages. With lots of love, EA  |
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FastForward Member
since 2008-06-29
Posts 66 |
What a nice, poetic recap. It reads "songlike". |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
Loved the poem with the picture. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done ;0 |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
one of my favorite of yours~ Hugs~ARH |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
If the pair turn out to be literal and not figurative, they're going to have alot to answer for, lol! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Quite an interesting take on the Adam and Eve story Michael but I'm afraid there has been a lot of forbidden fruit plucked from the tree since then. Enjoyed your write. Lindsay |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Margherita! Thank you for thinking it's charming! ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Alison- Why thank you !  ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Islander2- Really?.. Thanks ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
HopeS- Thank you! ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
OLIAS- Oh Shucks! thanks LOLARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
EA- Thank you for the REFREASHING remark! ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
FastF- Sing sing sing away! ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
JamesMichael- Thank you for enjoying my poem! ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Vandana- Why thanks ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
G-Shine: Thanks ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Tdiamond- Oh thank you! Glad you liked ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
ARH! I am so happy that it's one of your favs! OMG!- I am shocked LOL ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Garap.... Thanks ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Lindsay- I know what your saying! ARCTIC WIND |
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Lady Ayla Member
since 2008-07-19
Posts 84WV, United States |
I like how you took a well-known story and made it your own. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Artic Wind, This is a good poem. However, as I remember, God wasn't upset about the thievery, he was mad because he had told them to stay away from that tree. This is when all the trouble started. Bobby |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Lady- Thank you so much! ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Bobby- Just given it a little twist! ARCTIC WIND |
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