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Indigo
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since 2001-05-17
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0 posted 2008-07-06 01:12 AM


It was a pact
made with a stone-hearted gypsy
or perhaps
the devil himself

that carried her
to the dark of a bottom-less well
in pretense
that her thirst

could be quenched
like some open-minded cafe
that poured
endless liquid

steaming and frothy
while her limbs thrashed
the perfect
sands of her mandala

only to find them carried away
by tantric winds
into the night.


Indigo


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
1 posted 2008-07-06 03:27 AM


Awesome, insightful and impactful, dear Indigo.

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2008-07-06 03:54 AM


Excellent, beautiful poem!  I hope it was cathartic.  I am sorry for your pain.

I learnt 2 new words - mandala and tantric.  Thank you.  I looked them up on an Internet dictionary and realise that there is a lot more to both than I could read in one short explanation, but know, nevertheless, that I am enriched by what I read.

- Owl

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
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Antarctica
3 posted 2008-07-06 05:06 AM


Very very exquisite read.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
4 posted 2008-07-06 07:04 AM


and still she was a stranger?  enjoyed the pen here ms
Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2008-07-06 09:55 PM


Powerful write, Indigo.
                  Ida

FastForward
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since 2008-06-29
Posts 66

6 posted 2008-07-07 05:47 AM


"...thirst could be quenched..."

Makes me think that some promises (pacts) are so fictitious from the onset.  

Loved this muchly.

Indigo
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7 posted 2008-07-07 02:07 PM


Margherita-

Your pleasure at savoring my words is the greatest gift.  Many thanks.

Owl-
Isn't it great to learn something new everyday? Tibetan monks use millions of grains of colored sands to create incredible sand mandalas in 3 - 5 days.  Then they sweep up the sands to symbolize the impermanence of all that exists. The sand is given to the audience as blessings for personal health and healing.

Double X-
Namaste and thanks for your kind words.

DS-
Aren't we all strangers to ourselves at some time? Glad you enjoyed the write.

Ida-
Pleased you felt the energy of my humble musings.

FF-
Promises made in the now, are often blind to the future and past. That doesn't mean we believe in them any less. Thanks for reading.  

SEA
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with you
8 posted 2008-07-07 04:21 PM


I always love reading you
Indigo
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since 2001-05-17
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9 posted 2008-07-07 04:29 PM


Dear Sea-

We are kindred spirits in our quest for understanding and communing with the world around us. Heartfelt thanks.

Indigo

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
10 posted 2008-07-09 04:34 PM


Nope. Didn't lose anything the second time around.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

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