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Try to See Me Now
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Try to See Me Now |
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scoff Member
since 2008-07-04
Posts 71Georgia |
Try to see me now, my life changed, as it is, by more than time. Once-youthful expressions of trust, like an ancient, forgotten language, do not translate into thoughts of today. Still, silence speaks well of the past, yet does not render memory senseless ('though sometimes thoughts escape recapture and settle beyond senses' reach.) Long, dark years, like silent scavengers, have claimed me for their own, made me carrion for remembrances, left me corrupted with anguished skepticism. I see tomorrow, a dark road never ending, and a memory's glorious moment, flaring in a burst of incandescence, reflects on a thousand bright hopes shattered to a scattering of dust. Try to see me now, my vision changed, as it is, by more than experience. Now, nothing remains of the future that once I might have possessed. How the years have stripped me! of my sight, of the truth unspoken within me, its spell still unbroken by what mere words can express. Speak your truth quietly and clearly; |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: There are poetic heights in this thought provoking piece dear scoff. It's the way of universe to heal your pessimism and to plant new hope into your heart, if you decide to trust it. Love, Margherita |
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scoff Member
since 2008-07-04
Posts 71Georgia |
Thank you, Margherita. Life goes on, and the hours and the miles between then and now brought a whole new perspective. I didn't find hope, but I did find eventually, acceptance. I'll post another piece that may explain it better. It's called "Heedless Reality". |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
quote: ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Scoff, I'd try for a little more simplicity in your poetry. Bobby |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Yes I enjoyed your poem but felt rather sad to hear that you are losing your sight. It is one of our very special senses and my heart goes out to you my friend. It is wonderful how writing poetry or stories makes each day so much brighter. All the very best to you Scoff and God bless Lindsay |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
I am deeply touched by the emotions behind every word.. I relate to this more than I care to admit! For I feel the same, all hope is gone now! And all that is left is the scattered pieces ofall my shattered hopes! Yet I can wake up, with every sunrise in hope for a better tomorrow! Not for me but for my children... Jen--->MindBodySoul |
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scoff Member
since 2008-07-04
Posts 71Georgia |
Jen, Thank you for the comment. For as long as we live there is always tomorrow, and who knows what it might bring? Lindsay, You misunderstand. My loss of sight is not physical, only metaphorical. Garapan, You picked up on my favorite lines. What did you mean by that? Bobby, Would that my life allowed simplicity, but it doesn't. More's the pity. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I love your poetry just the way it is, Scoff. Keep writing, I'll keep reading. Ida |
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i_am_patch! Member
since 2008-06-24
Posts 108manila, philippines |
every thought is true and every line left me nodding.. the poem itself, left me speechless. "omnia vincit amor" |
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scoff Member
since 2008-07-04
Posts 71Georgia |
Thanks, Ida. I appreciate it. Your comment, Patch, is the kind of feedback that I, and I suspect every writer, always hope for. Thank you very much. |
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