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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2008-07-01 11:23 AM


Empty vase on an unset table,
Dimness fills the shuttered room,
Crystal washed and put away,
Silver shined in darkened drawer.

She enters with feathers reaching where able
Removing months of dust and gathered gloom,
Curtains now pulled lets in the fine summer day
Light washes where dark stained before.

White linen underlies the gold rimed white
A simple pattern yet an elegant design
Carried over in the sterling silverware,
And the crystal is equally fine.

All is prepared for fancy dinner that night,
Except for the empty vase that still sits there.

Gloom


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2islander2
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1 posted 2008-07-01 11:55 AM


May be if the vase is empty there is no love...How unfortunate....

thank you for sharing this beautiful painting.

yann

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2 posted 2008-07-01 12:28 PM


good read
Sunshine
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3 posted 2008-07-01 01:31 PM


So, what's the expectation? That the fine dinner is set to be laid out, and flowers will indeed be coming...along with the guest...



Enjoyed the imagery, Professor!

[And yes, I'm a terrible hoptimist... ]

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4 posted 2008-07-01 05:58 PM


I am seeing a 'what once was' scene unfold.
The fine dishes and silver are not on the table.
The empty vase cries of neglect.
No one is expected, no one will be coming.
This plays like the scene of a room after its occupants are gone...for good.
A fine somber write, Professor.

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2008-07-01 06:10 PM


I read this much the same way that Kacy does with the feeling that "the flowers" may be on a grave. What ever the true meaning, it is an exceptionally fine poem.
                                    Ida

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6 posted 2008-07-01 08:35 PM


there should always be flowers~~

M

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7 posted 2008-07-02 01:06 AM


awesome rhyme scheme Gloom!

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8 posted 2008-07-02 04:40 AM


I read lonely.  Perhaps an old woman who once had people to share time with - when meals were events, maybe parties.  Now it's like the music is playing but there is no one to dance with.  And the vases remain empty.

A

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9 posted 2008-07-02 05:08 AM


Nice writing...James
Margherita
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10 posted 2008-07-02 11:11 AM


Wonderful scenery, I read anticipation ... the light is there, crystals and silvers shine, white linen sounds of freshness, new beginnings ... the flowers will come ...

Love,
Margherita

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11 posted 2008-07-02 01:50 PM


The only thing missing visually were those darn flowers.
OwlSA
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12 posted 2008-07-02 05:19 PM


. . . and the people, Mysteria, and conversation and love - between man and woman, family, friends - and the garden outside.  

That empty vase - perhaps it is serving as an urn for somebody's ashes, perhaps she doesn't think about the fact that there should be flowers in it, perhaps the metaphorical flowers have gone out of her life, perhaps Professor Gloom is using it as a symbol of the absence of life, colour and the senses, perhaps it is something else.  A most effective poem.  

- Owl

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