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fill the empty void with a sick love song(ALLYS SONG)
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fill the empty void with a sick love song(ALLYS SONG) |
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gutkin76 New Member
since 2008-06-25
Posts 3 |
Here on this night, when the stars shine down here on this night, lets watch the world go round here on this night, let me hold you tight hang on to me, ill let u know it’s alright The snow falls gently as it falls on our cheeks we look at each other we don’t have to speak the sound of the traffic, the sounds of the night its you and me baby, lets watch the sight you're cuddled up cozy, held tight in my arms ill ward off your fears and protect u from harm ill kiss u real gently, and thats wen it'll start you'll kiss me right back and ill give u my heart!" the sun starts to rise as u wake up by my side your still in my arms theres no love to hide i kiss your cheek softly, hope this makes your day ally i love u, all i have to say your the best thing that happened, your all i can think when i am around you , you make my heart sink ill kiss u real gently and that when it'll start you'll kiss me right back and ill give u my hear For all u people who hate love songs for all u people sick of being sad for all of you who hate each other for all of you who wanna b glad i wish that one song could fix it it'd take out th dreadful taste if you love some one and u know it thew world will b a happier place here on this night when the stars shine down here on this night lets watch the world go round here on this night let me hold u tight hang on to me, you know its all right..... ------ ok this is one of the songs for my band! i usually like to start of my songs with writing poems first!! than get a tune to it! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CfKpVT4yKuQ ^^^that is the performed version of this, its terrible recording and it gets really loud half though and stuff but yeah watch a poem in action!  [This message has been edited by gutkin76 (06-25-2008 04:31 PM).] |
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Rocky Junior Member
since 2008-06-12
Posts 25 |
Great poem, although I have two complaints, 1. There are a few grammactical errors in the poem, 2. The url you supplied is not validly written, but don't worry for I mistype urls a lot. |
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