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Richy
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since 2003-05-03
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0 posted 2008-06-19 08:01 AM





I never really knew exactly
where my heart belonged
I’d wander in from town to town
but everywhere seemed wrong

No matter what I did
it never seemed to be enough
A tuckered out pretender
who had called his final bluff

It seems like I have always had
my face against the wind
The path is always steeper
when your heart is full of sin

It’s sad when all the things you want
are right behind a wall
It’s scary when you try to climb
and think you’re going to fall

I’ve spent my whole life fighting
just to let my soul be free
Never realizing that my troubles
were with me

I’ve walked so many miles
but I never really moved
My feet were always taking steps
but nothing would improve

I scaled one more peak to see
a wasteland down below
The trail only went one way
with no where else to go

I finally realized that I would
never find the end
I crawled out to the very edge
and started to descend

I walked into the dessert
looking for a flake of snow
They said I wouldn’t find it
but then how were they to know

You’re searching for a miracle
is what they said to me
You’re looking for one drop of water
in a deep blue sea

I told them that I didn’t wish
To tempt the hand of fate
I said the answers that we need
Can never come too late

They said no matter how I try
I can’t escape the truth
I told them I was ready
for whatever I am due

I finally stopped advancing
as I came upon a hill
The clouds above were moving
but my world was standing still

I stopped as mighty winds released
my spirit to the sky
I waited for the tears to fall
and hear the thunder cry

But all I felt was scorching pain
as I began to burn
I failed every chance I got
and now it was my turn

I fell down to my knees and
slowly lifted up the sand
I felt each second I had wasted
falling through my hands

I stared into the glaring sun
until I couldn’t see
Forgiveness was the only vision
that could set me free

I looked until the sky was black
and fell down on my face
Surrendering my dignity
I now was seeking grace

I felt my spirit lifting,
as a light began to glow
That day out in the dessert,
when the sky began to snow

Freedom of expression is our, write.

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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2008-06-19 09:57 AM


Rich,
I literally got tingles
when I read the perfect closing stanza
to this soul-stirring story!

"I felt my spirit lifting,
as a light began to glow
That day out in the dessert,
when the sky began to snow"



Let it snow! Let it snow! Let it snow!

Loving hug and a broad smile,
Linda


TinaTrivett
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since 2006-07-15
Posts 569

2 posted 2008-06-19 10:32 AM


This is so visually striking...much enjoyed.
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2008-06-19 01:46 PM


As usual, you had me spellbound way beyond the last word.  I love the photo too.

- Owl

graeshine2006
Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368
The Prairie Lands, USA
4 posted 2008-06-19 03:04 PM


I have to admit, I rarely read longer poems because I'm usually darting in and out to just check out what's new and try to get a few in .... but this one captured me right away and it wasn't because of the picture... well, it was the picture, but it was the picture you wrote, not the picture you posted!  Very nice.
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2008-06-19 06:53 PM


quote:
I stopped as mighty winds released
my spirit to the sky
I waited for the tears to fall
and hear the thunder cry



There are many poetic highlights in this wonderful introspective piece of poetry.

A love filled spirit like yours is a blessed spirit, dear Richy.

Enjoyed this so much and will read it again!

Love,
Margherita

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