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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-06-17 11:18 AM


you preferred the award kind of candy
capitalized abbreviations with lines between
like a snake skin beside your hammock
that needed refilling more often than you wanted to

something to do with kissing frogs and finding kings
rr something else if the magic was right
and it was almost sometimes
when you did a barefoot walk and listened to dreams

my mind boat was overly crowded perhaps
but you looked lovely with all of them
knowing their hands when they were handsome
and their wives when they were nonchalant

you kept me awake sometimes when you couldn't sleep
and ignored my eyes restlessly often
as if you knew I had a cure for touch place secrets
and didn't mind being the last time you said no again

when you opted your maybe behind the dragon's window

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daark

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1 posted 2008-06-17 04:34 PM


"And it was almost sometimes
When you did a barefoot walk and listened to dreams"


*sighs*

I love that part

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2008-06-17 04:45 PM


ms suesea, thanks babe..you would like it there I think..
serenity blaze
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3 posted 2008-06-17 05:42 PM


*chuckling*

There's a lot of good lines in this one, but not as good as the line that OUGHT to follow me in reply...

y'still got it goin' on, lovie!

*laughing delighted*

tease

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2008-06-17 08:18 PM


mmm... yes, everyone should keep options in mind Mr Daark... lovely gifting  ... lovely you!  x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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5 posted 2008-06-18 02:04 AM


quote:
as if you knew I had a cure for touch place secrets


D,

So much wonderful in this poem. You touch me as your words weave in the wonderful way that you weave them.

A

Margherita
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6 posted 2008-06-18 04:55 AM


quote:
my mind boat was overly crowded perhaps
but you looked lovely with all of them



To get a peek into your fabulous mind through your poetry is such a joyous experience!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2008-06-18 05:55 AM


ms serene...you do smile me babe...thanks so much

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ms ali-san, thanks for touching this one hon


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ms r&b, thanks so much lady friend for your smile side here


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ms mar, thank you for the eyes and smile

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