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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-06-16 06:08 AM


you said you were imperfect
in how your god placed your earth
around the soft of your heart
with no place for my hands
but you knew I would continue

reaching into your long shirt sky
and moving between the clouds
whispering on some sunday mornings
how your eyes are lovely with diamonds
that melt into water when you let them

I could take your boots off too
without you pushing me away
there are other ways to heal
and other ways to make you wounded
and did you ever wonder in bare feet

why you hadn't finished dressing

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1 posted 2008-06-16 10:23 AM


This is perfect.
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2 posted 2008-06-16 10:24 AM


"whispering on some sunday mornings
how your eyes are lovely with diamonds
that melt into water when you let them"


that's lovely D

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-06-16 06:01 PM


ms ali-san, thanks babe for the read


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ms suesea, thanks hon for the touch

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2008-06-16 07:59 PM


mmmm... melting here Mr Daark!  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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5 posted 2008-06-17 03:08 AM


quote:
in how your god placed your earth
around the soft of your heart



Not just the above lines are exceptional, but the poem in its whole. Words like veils to dance with.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2008-06-17 06:12 AM


ms r&b, thanks melting lovely..


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ms mar, thank you lady friend for your woman ways on this

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2008-06-17 09:50 AM


"there are other ways to heal
and other ways to make you wounded"


This whispered over every part of me.


"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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