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Open Poetry #42
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kanashe
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since 2008-05-21
Posts 59
america

0 posted 2008-05-30 09:11 AM


i hate the way you,
hate the way i
love you like rain falling from my eyes
i hate the way you
love the way i
think about you with her and it brings tears to my eyes

dont go leaving my world a mess
a fashionable wreck
pulling me apart by the seams of my broken heart
tie me together with the devil once again
read me my rights
and leave me in the cold

i love the way you
hate the way i
cant help but smile when i see you close by
i hate the way you
love the way i
feel lonely without you by my side

you left me here to fend for my soul
taking my heart
i'm on my own
write me a letter
lick it with love
i'm under the wheather
when i want to be above

i hate the way you
hate the way i
Love you

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passing shadows
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displaced
1 posted 2008-05-30 10:17 AM


neat!
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
2 posted 2008-05-30 12:56 PM


poet Ashe..enjoyed this one
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
3 posted 2008-06-02 06:35 AM


You gave this one a great rhythm and the conclusion is perfect ... you love and that is enough ... or maybe not in your eyes But to love is better than not to love or to indulge in fictitious love ...

Good job!

Love,
Margherita

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