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kanashe
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since 2008-05-21
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0 posted 2008-05-28 09:08 AM


heart pounding
no more sound

i'm on the ground
feeble and drowsy

feeling so lousy
piles of my soul all around

too much touch
not enough love

baby your just too much
too much hush

i'm throwing my heart away
tumbling down

i'm eternally bound
to you love i'm bound

circling happy
noticably snappy

take all my shame away
with one soft touch

calming my soul
taking me home

[This message has been edited by kanashe (05-29-2008 08:52 AM).]

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1 posted 2008-05-30 03:13 AM


kanashe,

I believe that every effort deserves recognition.  You have put time in this poem = like many of mine, I sense it might remain a work in progress.

Alison

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2 posted 2008-05-30 10:15 AM


I like this
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