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Richy
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0 posted 2008-05-26 01:34 PM


I was walking
On the beach this morning
As your light
Was still beyond the horizon

I was barefoot
And I was bitterly cold
But it didn’t really matter

That’s how it’s always been
When you’re on your side

Of our, bed

As the sun started
To sit up from
The ocean floor to rise
And stretch it’s
Fiery arms

I noticed
That I had been
Walking over
Some old footsteps
On the beach

Traces of someone else's
Life journey mometarily
Trapped
In the wet sands of time

I looked to see
If the person
Was ahead of me
But each time I did
The fog rolled over

And blanketed who it was,
If anyone

I followed the steps
Up and away
from the water

To an old abandoned beach chair
That had a scarf tied to it

That was flittering in the wind
Making it's own song and dance
with the flap
Of forgotten shoe

I picked up the yellow sash
And it smelled of salt
And beauty

It tasted like first light
And it was soft, like
Lost hope

I held it too my face
And pressed it to my lips

And moved on

These bewildering steps
Took me over
Marsh covered dunes
And around
A Monterrey pine
Where a small bird had fallen
From it’s nest

I went to put it back
In it’s home
But it flew off
Toward the haze

Of it’s tomorrows

I heard a seagull fly by me
But I couldn’t see it

This mossy mist
Had embraced me
And I was just
Following these prints
Of someone elses existence

One stride
At a time

Another gull flew by,
And then another

And soon I could hear
A whole flock of them
Shrieking up ahead of me

As I quickened my pace

Coming around a rock formation
I thought I heard a splash

As the light ripped open the dim

Looking behind me
I saw my trail had disappeared
Into the rising tide

And looking ahead
I saw the only steps left

Walking into the tide…

The sea had
A peacefulness to it
As the waves
Slowly started to wash away
The few words

Left

Of a swim
Hopefully

But possibly
Someone’s
Final chapter

I reached down
Into the last imprint

Right before it was erased
From earth’s memory

And lifted up a small pebble

It cut into my hand
As it glistened with the light
Of a million sorrows

My red  
Dripping
Onto
The blue

Into an unwritten ending

That swam away
With the moaning swells

I threw the stone
As far I could
But I did not

Hear the splash

The birds were heading
Out to sea

And so was the wave
From the gem I threw
Of your, spirit

To the other side,

of our world




Freedom of expression is our, write.

[This message has been edited by Richy (05-26-2008 05:56 PM).]

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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2008-05-26 01:56 PM


Richy, in all sincerity, that was one of the most pulchritudinous poems that I have ever had the pleasure of perusing.

I was absorbed in every line ~ in every rapturous mot. I could have read this into Forevermore.

What a writer, ye be!

With love and a smile,
Linda


Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2008-05-26 06:12 PM


Gosh that word Linda used ... "pulchritudinous" got my attention and in German it means "schön". What an original way to say "beautiful"

You took me on some morning walk, dear Richy! (though it's midnight here now ...) Such enticing visuals! No doubt, you are deeply inspired these days.

A pleasure to read!

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2008-05-26 07:11 PM


I agree with these two ladies though I have no idea how to spell that p word LOL


OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2008-05-27 10:18 AM


This is exquisite - and exquisitely sad.  Fortunately, I imagine that this is about the imaginary woman you were talking about previously - which is also sad.  I love the dream-like quality and the meanderings of your mind blending with the wanderings of your feet.

It reminds me a little bit (except that your poem is far better than mine) of one I wrote about a (real) guy at our church who I thought was interested in me, but later realised that he couldn't have been.  Anyway, at least I got a poem out of it!  In fact, it is the next one in my collection to post (I am a couple of years behind as I haven't been in here for a while - just as well for me, because I haven't written anything in a while - too much of a struggle to survive at the moment - jobwise, not healthwise!).  In fact I tried to post it a short while ago, but kept losing my connection with Pip and I think it didn't post.  I hope it didn't because I am going to try again.

- Owl

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