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Claira
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British but living in Thailand

0 posted 2008-05-25 10:47 PM



When I sit and try to write
Often there is one huge fight
Ego jumps in, says, “I know”
Practiced patience never show.

Then the critic on shoulder sits
Shouts, “You really are the pits”
“What makes you think you can speak?”
Makes me feel both shy and weak

Now its fear raising ugly head
Self-pity helps keep it fed,
“No-one listens, haven’t heard
You can’t put truth into word!”

Then once they have had their say
Don’t return, until next day

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Richy
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1 posted 2008-05-25 11:52 PM



Dear Claira,

Do me a favor and knock that critic of your shoulder and tell him that he's the pits. And while you're at it, you need to wrestle fear and self-pity into a chokehold until they tap out as well.

This was sensitive, and poignant, and really just wonderful.

And don't worry, those same three pin me down all the time too.

Maybe we can tag team against them?

Rich

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2008-05-26 12:36 PM


Yo dear Claira,

Never feel shy and weak, you're not.  Just get in there and yammer away to your hearts content.

That's the ticket.

Love Bobby

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3 posted 2008-05-26 12:45 PM


C

I think that critic needs to find a new home.  I like your writing.  So, come on down and let me knock it off!

A

Claira
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British but living in Thailand
4 posted 2008-05-26 03:29 AM


I'm choking up, thanks for the lovely comments.

Richy - Yesterday was a particularly bad demon day. Thank you for your support. I've only just recently starting writing again. Hardly wrote anything for nearly 20 years, so I'm sure there will be more battles lol.

Bobby - Thank you for your kind words. I will continue to wittle

Alison - I'll come round later. Glad you enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2008-05-26 09:57 AM


Claira! It was wonderful to see your sweet face smiling at me this morning!

By the way, I happen to be a fan of your writing, so you tell those three naysayers that Earth Angel's got your back!

I understand where you're coming from!

Love to you! ~ and keep on writing! You are developing quite the following, here at PiP!

Linda

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