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ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

0 posted 2008-05-20 03:10 PM

a well or feeling un-whole
   the bottomless side of a coin drop
that wishes never hear,

   in silent freefall

a still, so silent and cold
   inwhich we confide, become lost in
and find every fear ...

   hid beyond it's wall

to face it's persistant gaze
   we first need to dream
allowing us to set
   a volume to our mind
which hides what we maze

   and place out of reach,
inside such a scream

the hidden truth for someone else to find

   ... hid within us each

In rhythms to a rise the days shall follow ... each Yesterday, each Tomorrow. - Ct/05

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2008-05-20 03:14 PM

"a still, so silent and cold
inwhich we confide, become lost in
and find every fear ...

hid beyond it's wall"

oh this is cool

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2008-05-20 10:48 PM

could not pick a favorite part...it is all good...style lends to its meaning as well

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

3 posted 2008-05-20 10:54 PM

ctowen- Your style is very fresh and honest. You describe the journey within quite well.
I enjoyed the lines:
"a still, so silent and cold
   inwhich we confide, become lost in
and find every fear ...

   hid beyond it's wall"
but I think you missed a space between in and which in inwhich. So much is told in your cryptic verse.  I enjoyed reading
sharyn

"God made you as you are
in order to use you
as He planned" J.C. Macauley

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia