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jmjovies Junior Member
since 2008-05-03
Posts 32florida |
her father would sit with a rolled up towel supporting his neck. his daughter never bothered asking why, he never made much sense to her. his sons didn’t need to ask, they’d been in locker rooms and knew a towel is a weapon even when it’s only used for resting. when she was very young sometimes he would bring her to mountain forests and show her how to track bears and moose and how to build fires. he taught her to walk like she was in a jungle being stalked, so she learned that silence is safe. she asked him once about his war because she wanted him to tell her he was a hero and undamaged, but all he said was if he had known better he would have stabbed himself in the leg. now she walks like a giant tank through forests, scaring all the creatures on purpose because she would learn that silence is permissive. and sometimes when she sleeps she still dreams that no one can hear her when she screams. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is an excellent write...loved the resolution of your ending: "because she would learn that silence is permissive. and sometimes when she sleeps she still dreams that no one can hear her when she screams." |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
I enjoyed the flow of this insightful poem. But the ending was the most evocative: "because she would learn that silence is permissive. and sometimes when she sleeps she still dreams that no one can hear her when she screams." It was the unexpected twist that clarified the rest. sharyn "God made you as you are |
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