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The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

0 posted 2008-05-19 05:04 PM

Twin cerulean eyes
peer up at the moon

Usually...
proud
stoic
and bemused

Now...
pallid
wounded
and confused

Solemnly comptemplating
her blues away

Tensed and overburdened
with the wreakage of her past
she mournfully lamented
her tormented tenderness

Reflecting inwardly-
meditatively thinking-
emotionally drained
she howled

Crying away
each
passing
pain

Until her eyes,
paled with age,
pooled together
what remained

Reaffirmed in her strength,
now the wolf
became a girl
gazing at the moon

Tear-stained eyes
and all

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-05-19 10:39 PM

The Shadow in Blue,

The words are there. I rather like this.

Bobby

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

2 posted 2008-05-19 11:27 PM

Welcome to Pip. You can get a lot of positive feedback here. I was deeply committed to the poem with it's structure and rythmn until past midway where the wolf analogy starts- I lost the connection there. Still found much to enjoy.
sharyn

"God made you as you are
in order to use you
as He planned" J.C. Macauley

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

3 posted 2008-05-21 10:06 AM

.... shades of blue intensify you

I will be eyeing for more!

Ct

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2008-05-21 10:56 AM

this is awesome! hits close to my heart!

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

5 posted 2008-05-21 04:01 PM

I enjoyed this one. The metaphor was clear to me, and well-visualized.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

shakalakaboomboom
Junior Member

since 2008-05-19

Posts 44
V.A, U.S.A

6 posted 2008-05-21 05:15 PM

WoW!
Bravo! what a nice poem, i like it ^^

~Savana

The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

7 posted 2008-05-21 08:02 PM

Thanks for the kind remarks everyone. I appreciate it greatly and am glad you guys enjoyed it.

Merci Beacoup!
~Jill

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2008-05-23 07:14 PM

I do so enjoy a good metaphorical write! I really got into this one! Howling here! lol

Pleased to make your acquaintance!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel

The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

9 posted 2008-05-24 11:26 AM

E.Angel

I'm glad you enjoyed my metaphorical morsal of feral delight. It was a joy to write.

I hope to read more of your delightful poems and am pleased to finally make your acqaintance.

J.

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