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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2008-05-18 05:07 PM


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Ah Jose
You say it’s wrong

Their tight pants
That stop
Below the waist
Showing a little skin

Know my friend
It won’t last for long
Being only
A matter of time

Winter comes
To flowers
And their dreams

Let them
Have their moment
In the sun


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-05-18 05:24 PM


A philosophical approach to the extravagances of youth ...

Very good, John.

love
Margherita ... who suddenly is aware of being among the fading flowers   ... no, I still love the sun ... on my face

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

2 posted 2008-05-18 09:29 PM


ah, then...but that which looks good in May, may not in September...the trick is to understand the calendar
r v wooo
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since 2007-08-07
Posts 656

3 posted 2008-05-19 10:18 AM


got that right...fashion...like the seasons...comes and goes though the cycles are not always as consistent as the seasons...yep, let them have their moment.
shyvl
Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531
texas, usa
4 posted 2008-05-19 12:53 PM


I say "Let them have their moment in the sun. Too soon winter comes". I love the way you express your thoughts so vividly with out direct inferences. Your meaning is keep clean without embellishments.
sharyn

"God made you as you are
in order to use you
as He planned"  J.C. Macauley

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
5 posted 2008-05-20 02:44 PM


This one hit straight home!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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