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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-05-18 07:04 AM


House…1
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Four walls lift it on their shoulder.
Sounds of rain dropping on it was the music
My childhood likes most.
A kite is dangling from its corner.
Roof looks at its brilliant colors.
I know that it would like to have a flight with it.



House…2
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Run through the corridor and stumble.
The dark red of bruise,
Mother has gone to market
And you will not tell father.
Is it true that rebuke is painful
Even more than a bruise?

clever talks delay friendship!

© Copyright 2008 poddar kushal - All Rights Reserved
2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
1 posted 2008-05-18 07:29 AM


It's about your youth, about sadness and secrets; very enjoyable to read.

     Yann

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
2 posted 2008-05-18 08:19 AM


Ku... I like your softness here... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2008-05-18 08:52 AM


Dear Ku, these are two gems and I felt as if I was an eye witness to every scene you painted here with your usual mastery.

Your sensitive heart nudged you into poetry and I am so happy it did.

This is a keeper ...
and yes a rebuke hurts more than a bruise sometimes .

Love and hugs.
Margherita

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
4 posted 2008-05-18 01:52 PM


Very well done, my friend...glad I didn't miss reading this.

jimmy

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
5 posted 2008-05-18 02:36 PM


a tender touch here

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2008-05-18 03:17 PM


I agree with RDB on this one!


ARCTIC WIND

Poetaddict
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since 2008-05-18
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7 posted 2008-05-18 09:06 PM


i loved it alot... you got talent though!
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