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Robert E. Jordan
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0 posted 2008-05-16 06:57 PM


Sally’s dancing the bar
down at the corner of
Richmond and Allegheny.  

It’s real handy like,
right down the street.  

Felix always walks her
down there and back,
just in case there’s any trouble
from her ardent admirers.  

After all,
she’s just a skinny little girl,
there’s not much to her at all.  

She’s up there on the dais,
in the center of the room.  

Sally’s wearing her tiny tutu
and pasties on her breasts.  

She’s dancing slow and smooth.  

Sally’s twists and turns,
her gyrations and backbends,
have the crowd enthralled.  

She doesn’t need any music.  
She’s got the rhythm in her head.  

Bobby

[This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (05-17-2008 01:09 PM).]

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2islander2
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1 posted 2008-05-17 01:13 PM


Hi Bobby, very nice poem with a message of beauty, I liked it

  yann

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2008-05-17 03:50 PM


Thanks Yann,

I'm very pleased the poem works for you.  BTW, Sally says hello.

Bobby

Margherita
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3 posted 2008-05-17 07:50 PM


I feel that Sally loved to dance and she even did not need the music you say ... yes I believe you, she was the music.

Lovely portrait, dear Bobby.

And I like to learn how you made her feel safe.

Love,
Margherita

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2008-05-17 08:57 PM


Thanks dear Margherita,

Yes, Sally is a lovely girl, in more ways than one.

Felix always has this air of confidence about him.  Then of course there is his knife fetish.  He always keeps his blade razor sharp.  Remember, it's a neighborhood bar, everyone knows Felix.

Love Bobby

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5 posted 2008-05-17 10:07 PM


I'm glad Felix was able to protect Sally.
                                  Ida

Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2008-05-17 10:30 PM


Thanks dear Ida,

We have to take care of our own.  It's kind of the second rule of nature.  The first rule to be to take care of yourself.

Love Bobby

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7 posted 2008-05-18 07:29 AM


It would appear that sultry Sally has the music not only in her head ~ but in her hips as well! lol


Linda

Robert E. Jordan
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8 posted 2008-05-18 09:05 AM


Thanks dear Linda,

Yes, it's true. Sally does have very musical hips.  She's a wonderful and very talented young lady.

Love Bobby

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9 posted 2008-05-24 02:09 AM


You know, you are generous in letting us see the tender side of Felix as he walks Sally back and forth.  And also in how you share Sally and let us see her from different angles and shadows.

A

Robert E. Jordan
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10 posted 2008-05-24 08:44 AM


Alison,

Thanks for the kind words on this poem.  You know Felix is always the gentleman, it's part of the trade.

Bobby

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