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Drag in the Drama |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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She's sophisticated, opinionated says she hasn't got time to borrow so she's slamming the door and there's no breaking her down she's going to settle a score Without a place in the sun for her shadow. She leans to the left like a blinker left blinking and taken a wrong turn going one way in her mind. Every argument she argues is a study in contrasts She's on a crash course determined to win. She's high and she's mighty without her conscience in tact and cares less about bridges she's burned. Her heart is so cold it's dropped below zero escaping behind words misconstrued. She's serving herself with facts that she lacks and can wing it all in a day. She knows the way around circles but gets lost in the crowd she's obscure and evasive when pressed. Says she's got her reasons that no one can follow in drag in the drama she's staged. It's all about her and she wants it both ways. She's a vamp and villain a starlit and vixen that sets her apart in a battle of wills. Leading the war that she's waged. It's her call and last word and she's so unaware of the sound and effects that drown out her voice she's wound up so tight with no where to run it's a deep and dark hole that her head is stuck in. So she waits in the wings while fanning the flames shading her eyes with half truths she's her own encore encore and beams in the limelight flawed by her true colors and original design. Her engaging engagement it's boarder line trite it's meaningless and I'm getting bored. She looks somewhat familiar but she's not the same her smile is set and half cockeyed. Side note~~ It's unkind to kick someone when they're down, but it's unhuman to kick someone when they're dying. Hence, my poem. It's my own anger management assignment, because I'm so mad I could spit! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-11-2008 02:27 AM).] |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow, this is good. We all know someone like that. I'd say you managed your anger pretty well. Ida |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"It's my own anger management assignment" I wish I could do that as well as you~~  M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
one never forgets a pirate smile |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bluezy... I would place odds on your kicks being the best any day...enjoyed your spitanger babe |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A powerful write, dear Lori, I am sure you breathe easier after this intense outpour of your emotions. May there be an increase in awareness! Love, Margherita  |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. |
My sister boroke my father's heart while he was on his death bed. I am at a loss to understand this. And she has only gotten worse. Rick |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well thanks everyone. I know this reads a little choppy, (just a teeny tiny bit) But I had this urgent need to vent. So thanks to each of you for reading and replying. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Bluesy - So sorry that you've experienced the "dark side" of someone but you sure can "spit" the words out most eloquently or is that vehemently ...  I too have come across people who surpass my understanding so I can relate to your write. These days, however, I'm inclined to "allow" them to take responsibility for their own actions and manage to let a lot of things pass me by. Sometime's it's not an easy thing to do but "every day I'm getting better and better" - I like to think so at any rate. All that aside I did enjoy your "vent". Hugs Helen |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
How much worse can it be, than to deprive one of their dignity, in their final hour. So sorry for you Bluesy, and this special person in your life who’s in the midst of passing on. Happy Mother’s Day to you. Your loved ones are very lucky To have you in their hearts |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
BluesSerenade, This comes across to me as largely incoherent rambling. Bobby |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I understand "mad". I have a hard time being "it". quote: Honey, it's so danged good to read you again! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like a charging bull in a china shop coming at ya head on......get out of the way!!!!!!!!! wow glad to see you here, venting, and all keep em coming |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Way good to see you again Bluesy. Welcome home... let it all out, expect us to hug you... And conjure oZ for the house to land in beautiful dreams! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're all so good to me and I thank you so very much. I was on the fence as to whether I should delete this all together, but I know that's not the right thing to do. Like I said earlier, it's a little choppy....at best. Perhaps I should have taken more time. I know life is not always a bed of roses, or a bowl of cherries...Or that we all appreciate the same kind of poetry. With that said, I feel the need to address Robert Jordan's offensive and insulting reply. Robert Jordan~ Read my critique flag. I get the feeling you are the self appointed poetry policeman and I don't appreciate your comments, especially after I made it known that I am well aware this was not my best work. I take the guidelines very seriously here at PIP, especially when it comes to respect and tolerance. (read my lips) I notice you nit pickin' on several poets, and it's none of your business if they're crossing their T's or capitalizing their i's. I honestly don't know how you get away with it!! Maybe it's because you have way too much time on your hands, or was it Felix who made you do it!! Either way I think you're a tad out of line to the point of being rude! Thank you very much. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
You know what Bluesy? You're the best, and I'm proud of you. Rich |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Extra hugs just because you know that I know you know and more~~~(if you feel like it, send me an email so we can keep in touch) again just because I like how you "say" it!M |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Just came back in for another read, and to leave some |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Hey you. I'm glad you obeyed the no spitting rule.  Nicely done rant. Besides we're not always that cleared headed when we're ranting. Well, at least I'm not.If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Quite the waves you're churning up...and lovely storms you brew! Hugs, R |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lori I understand this so much, and am huggin you. You have my e if you need it and know that I am thinking of you always. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Bluesy, you rock! I'd want someone like you in my corner! You're the best. I loved how you expressed your righteous indignation ~ and with such power! You vented like an avenging angel! ~ if there is such a thing! The 'choppiness' of which you speak ~ albeit tiny ~ only adds to the rawness and vehemence of your words. The words are spilled directly from your guts ~ and I felt them! I wish I could vent like you! Unfortunately for my own well-being, I am too guarded. Lori, I have compassion for your situation and admiration for your strength ~ and talent! Love and a warm, understanding hug, Linda |
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