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rad802
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since 2008-04-19
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KY U.S.A.

0 posted 2008-05-10 07:11 AM


A woman strains for a piece of happiness
can't seem to filter through the noise
to separate fashion from beauty importance from petty
she doesn't even realize she's pretty

We are after all a collection of our choices
superimposed upon a frail genetic frame
So few listening the cacophony of voices
does not communicate except to the insane

A man discovers greatness where he least expects
nurtures to fruition something grand
The greatest part of himself focused in on scheming
he doesn't even realize he's dreaming

We are after all a collection of our choices
wrapped around a frail genetic frame
so few are free to give... this consummate society
has little left to take but this we'll do and in God's name


I like this ending better.

Rick Delmonico

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Clang
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since 2005-12-15
Posts 222

1 posted 2008-05-10 09:11 AM


Nice work...enjoyed.
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
2 posted 2008-05-10 11:35 AM


You manage to tap in to the human spirit, however fragile it may be, you expose it in an honest to goodness light.

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We are after all a collection of our choices
superimposed upon a frail genetic frame

Yea that!!!  

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