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Open Poetry #42

Trials

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

0 posted 2008-05-09 07:32 PM

trails make you
stronger
trails make you
grow
trails make you
learn that
nothing is
for sure

they make you
see that you have
to be ready
to let go
some people
that you
thought would
be your friends
forever

you can
never
be too sure

JJ

[This message has been edited by hiddensmiles (05-10-2008 01:52 AM).]

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-05-09 08:48 PM

Yo JJ,

The idea is definately there. It just need a little polish.

Also, that should be "too", and not "to" in the line:

"be too sure"

Bobby

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