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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2008-05-08 11:23 PM



We are raindrops
pathless

Lay down with me
lover
in this banquet of green
where robins bloom
on sycamores
and leaves collapse
on the meadow

and all of us dressed
in the glorious coats
of the nightstorm.

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AAB
Member
since 2008-04-10
Posts 99
Canada
1 posted 2008-05-08 11:52 PM


absolutly wonderfull.

"Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride

SkaaDee
Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116
Canada
2 posted 2008-05-08 11:59 PM


Very nice.
Beautiful.

... but it threw me, I can't understand how the meadow can be so colourful at night.



  

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2008-05-09 07:36 AM


very pretty, my friend...

j.

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
4 posted 2008-05-09 07:56 AM


Michele, Michele ... this is a magical scenery.

So intensely rendered, that I can feel the meadow's touch.

Love,
Margherita

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
5 posted 2008-05-09 09:11 AM


Pretty gifts lady!
Indigo
Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602

6 posted 2008-05-09 02:39 PM


pathless until pooled
in storm-fed fields
till morning light
evaporates them once more.

Dug this, IG.

Indigo

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
7 posted 2008-05-09 03:10 PM


ms inky...a pleasure to watch you in the rain
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
8 posted 2008-05-09 05:49 PM


Soemtimes the color is everywhere, behind your lids, in a touch....

As always, inviting, enticing write.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
9 posted 2008-05-09 06:18 PM


very very nice Ink, thanks to you

      yann


Richy
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050

10 posted 2008-05-09 08:29 PM



I love this.
I know I'm strange, but romantic to me, is the wind, and the night. Just the two of us, against, everything, there ever was. I've missed your writing Goddess. So nice to read you again. And so glad you're still here.

Rich

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
11 posted 2008-05-09 08:46 PM


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This is very good . . .

John

PS  Read a third time, still of the same opinion.
With your permission, would like to include this
in my Word files of Poems by Others.  Who do I say
is the author?

.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

12 posted 2008-05-09 11:49 PM


this one begs the reader's attention -- and I've read it over and over...enjoying it more each time
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
13 posted 2008-05-10 01:19 AM


Hi there blondielocks~
Your poem leaves alot to the imagination, and/or gets it going pretty good!

Very Nice write~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
14 posted 2008-05-10 08:36 AM


thank you all
for laying in the green
with me

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