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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A glimpse that's all I was allowed - a negative of what could be I held it to the light and I, consumed with curiousity saw the lines you would not write. Your colors held no vibrancy - just more of your transparency I squinted. I gave up the fight and fed the film to candlelight one frame at a time as you were clarified in ebony wisps of black-smoked truth. * * * Thanks Kari...I didn't catch the missed word until I saw it highlighted in your reply. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive write, dear Karen! Intriguing too. It looks like a definitive detachment and is so powerfully rendered. Love, Margherita  |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Karen... you really write so beautifully... I am in awe of your talent... love RDB x Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: That's because you always read between the lines, and it doesn't hurt that you're one smart cookie.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Burning a 'negative' can ofttimes produce positive results! ~ An en-lighten-ing experience! I could visualize you feeding the frames one by one into the purifying flame. Well done! ~ in more ways than one! winky wink Linda |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very interesting write, love the depth and wit. Ida |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I'm trying to think of how I could photograph this poem. I'll let ya know if I come up with anything...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 to Dunc...and oh man..  sometimes I just freak myself out. I wrote this yesterday, and I go to the doctor today only to hear that they haven't yet received my "film" back from the labratory. Weird. I wish it would stop.  Thank you all for being so kindly as I exposed myself. Heh.  |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Hi, Ser.  I don't get in here often enough. Did I ever tell you how you make one action and describe it vividly? I am sure I have but I am running out of inspiration struck replies for your work. I just sit around...jaw dropped...and drool now....lol! "...buried way beneath the sheets |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grin.. "jaw dropped...and drool" That's pretty apropro considering that's how I am when I write this stuff. And where the heck have ya been? I was just in Picayune a couple of weeks ago--a friend and I had lunch at "Two Sisters"... drop me a line, will ya? I've missed you. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Karen, when I read you ... it's more like an "experience". I love the lines throughout, particularly this one .... "Your colors held no vibrancy - just more of your transparency" WONDERFUL contrast and visual. Great flow ... I really enjoyed this! Best wishes and big hugs, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm not exactly at my best right now. I don't know who said, but I do recall reading of someone who had said that writing is either incredibly easy or incredibly hard. This ... I know it doesn't look like it, but it was incredibly hard. Maggie-May-Margherita? You always make me smile. Your words are a warm hug, and I thank you. Roneice? Don't lock me outta that little frig just yet! Kari? Linda? Feathery hugs, and forgive my molting. grin... Duncan. I just plain miss the good ole daze. So hugs. Temptress...aptly named, and that you are! We are thisclose on the map. Give me a call, will ya? and Kit? oyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy...you're one of my heroes. you and I have dancing to do! Thanks for reading, and my love to all. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Another wonderful piece! Serenity... I think you write with such beauty and expressive words ARCTIC WIND |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Serenity blaze== how appropriate your verse flames with intensity and your imagery so acurately captures your meaning. Thanks for sharing sharyn |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hugs to (((((((((((aw))))))))))) and shvl, you have also been too kind. And just as soon as I survive the Month of May, I hope to have some nice leisurely time to return the favor of time. oy...Life's landmarks are rather like landmines, it occurs to me. (and no it's not MY prom, nor is it MY graduation, but lawsy, you'd think it was...) laughing--thank you! |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This makes sense to me. I remember when things I wrote used to make sense to me. I wonder when it stopped. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
...hmmm...burning plastic...bad idea, Al Gore would not approve! Next time, use a shredder. *GRIN* Always good cher, always good. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, lovely to see and read you again. Kit hit the nail on the head. Reading your poetry is always an experience! I read this as being about a person until you mentioned the doctor. I hope that your medical news will be good. Please let us know. - Owl |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
I always enjoy your poetry...and this, a powerful message in few lines! Hugs, R |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Um..it really was a negative I was burning. Charly's right, it's prolly a carcinogen. It sin't easy bein' weird. and oh my Owlllllll.... speaking of weird, I was going through stuff last night and found an Owl coffee cup, and I thought, "I'll bet my owl is coming back!" And here you are... and you guys have been so kind to me while I learn how to do this stuff all over again. Love you all bunches.  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beeeeeg smiles, Karen! Thanks for the wonderful Serenity Blaze welcome! That really is weird - about the Owl cup heralding my return! It's so good to be back. - Owl |
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