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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-05-04 08:46 AM



something gypsy in the dark
that hydes your pleasure there
raven wing with liquor
and fingertips worshiping

my eyes are hurry shoes then
in a highway's flickering
and you look back again
over your shoulder's whisper

pretending you don't see me
but knowing my panting poems
like the buttons of your mind
that you leave undone sometimes

just for the pleasures mending
that makes you touch heaven
with your eyes closed slowly
unwrapping the sinful savoring

and spending nights in my daydreams
____________

daark



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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2008-05-04 10:39 AM


Every line is like a sip of ambrosia!

You are terrific, dear D.!

Love,
Margherita


Earth Angel
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2 posted 2008-05-04 10:43 AM


"my panting poems"

~ I couldn't have said it better, myself! lol

panting,
EA

shyvl
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3 posted 2008-05-04 11:06 AM


Your poems leave me breathless.  As always a fantastical read.
Sharyn

Magnus
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4 posted 2008-05-04 12:22 PM


I do enjoy reading you,  each line is
a pleasure.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-05-04 07:29 PM


wonderful Mr Daark... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
6 posted 2008-05-04 11:22 PM


my eyes are hurry shoes then
in a highway's flickering
and you look back again
over your shoulder's whisper

pretending you don't see me

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Dig it Mr. Mosey, you tease!!

Hug~
  

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2008-05-05 06:05 AM


ms mar, thank you lady friend.


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ms ea, grin....thanks babe


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ms shyvl, thank you for looking into this one


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magnus, thanks much amigo for the read


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r&b, thanks lady friend for the touch
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ms bluezy, thanks hon for playing on this window



Alison
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8 posted 2008-05-05 12:11 PM


Hey D,

I thought I had replied to this twice now - and each time - ta da - my reply is gone.  Maybe it was eaten by the beauty of your poem, absorbed into the atmosphere, stomped on by little feet (you can thank Balladeer for that one - I am now obsessed by feet.  I have developed a foot fetish and I have ALWAYS hated feet!).  Anyway, I am distracted by my obvious personal issues going on over in the Poetry Workshop.

I love this poem.  Your feet are perfect (laughs and wanders out).

A

steavenr
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9 posted 2008-05-05 01:46 PM


love your word choices in this very interesting write...specially loved this line:

"like the buttons of your mind
that you leave undone sometimes"  now that is cool

Indigo
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10 posted 2008-05-05 04:31 PM


that first step
slows her pace,
quickens her breath,
and hastens the descent
into undone.

Indigo





nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
11 posted 2008-05-05 07:04 PM


I couldn't have replied any better than Indigo
M

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2008-05-06 06:01 AM


ms ali-san, thank you for the comment..and for being a foot in this venue

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steavenr, thank you sir for the comments


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ms indi, sometimes I quite writing for a moment just to see who is at arm's length, thanks babe


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ms MMs, thank you hon, your replies are always a treat

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