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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2008-05-04 02:45 AM


Time is like a railway track
that ends where I can’t see
to make me know love disappears
when it speeds by in the mind
and doesn’t stop to touch.

And touch is like a safe place
that welcomes in the free
and manifests through physical
how the spirit feels.

And how the spirit feels
is most times like a mystery
that unfolds when it’s too late
to impart the meaningful
through a sigh, a smile,
and a twinkle in the eye.

And a twinkle, sigh, and smile
is like precious cutlery
that slips the meaningful
into soul’s awesome life.

And soul’s awesome life
is when you pass through mind
but two hands interlocked
is a woman’s need, desire.

And a woman’s need, desire
is imparted through the mind
when lovers are the way they are
and not how they” think” they are.

And how they think they are
is plain and simply, don’t you know,
life’s greatest ever lie!

Helen / 4 May 2008


© Copyright 2008 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-05-04 05:37 AM


You used a special form here for your heart and soul ponderings, dear Helen, and the result is great I think.
The conclusion comes a little unexpected, but no doubt you may be right that we experience true love only when we let go all the obstacles created by "mind structures" and flow with the feelings.
We should simply let go and flow with love.
And now you might write the sequel to this ... excluding the "think how" and just letting the feelings speak.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Richy
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050

2 posted 2008-05-04 05:56 AM



Oh so true Helen. Perception is reality, yes? We are to a large degree, how we are perceived. No matter how we think, otherwise. Oh yeah, And… I loved this.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2008-05-04 06:47 AM


Helen... your talent is amazing!  lovely gifting here ... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

shyvl
Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531
texas, usa
4 posted 2008-05-04 08:27 AM


I really enjoyed the way you framed this poem and the tale it tells. Love is always half truth, half lies, perhaps because we don't always know the truth ourselves.  A truly well written piece.
sharyn

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2008-05-04 09:58 AM


Hello, Honey!

"Time is like a railway track
that ends where I can’t see"

~ Memorable lines!

"And a twinkle, sigh, and smile
is like precious cutlery
that slips the meaningful
into soul’s awesome life."

~ May your soul be justly rewarded with such "precious cutlery".

Loving hug,
Linda

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2008-05-04 01:02 PM


Thanks "guys"!  I really do appreciate each and every comment.
steavenr
Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

7 posted 2008-05-04 05:03 PM


interesting write...neatly and nicely constructed...
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