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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
This is one of my first again so bear with me here…hahahha There is a lot of repetition in this one but like I said before, I tap it out when it comes and what ever it says I tap. I did try to revise it and take out all the repeats but when I did it just didn’t “feel” the same so I have left it as I originally wrote it. I am thinking of changing some of the layout of it… not sure yet. 5/2/07 How? To step forward when all you want is to fall back. To think ahead when all you can see is behind. To find strength when the darkness feels so inviting. To search for the brightness when your light has been diminished. To force a smile when all you can do is weep. When a piece of your soul has been stripped from your very existence. When your very reason for living is no longer alive. When the very one you nurtured from nothing more than a seed, the very one you promised to love, care for, and PROTECT until your very last day, the very one you dreamed for… when he is no longer and never again will be. When the pain is so excruciating, so unbearable that you think of wishing for your own death. How? How then do you put one foot in front of the other? How? How then do you think of tomorrow? How? How then do you wake from the night? How? How then do you look to the sunshine? How? How then do you once again smile? How? How then do you continue to live? You find comfort in love. You find comfort in the love you have for him. You find comfort in the love he had for you. You find comfort in the love you share for him. You find strength in memories. You find strength in your memories of him. You find strength in memories shared. You find strength in others memories. You give love, comfort, and strength. To those, who like you, will forever love, remember, and miss him. But whatever you do, you do go on. For him, for his memory, for the love he unselfishly gave, You DO go on. For you Larry, for you I will go on. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I think that you honor Larry's life with every poem that you write - with every honest thought that you express. You also bring love and compassion to those in your life now. The repition works for me because I can hear you crying out those questions. There are sometimes no answers - just hugs and assurances that you are making a difference in letting people know that grief is natural, necessary and can be expressed. So hugs to you - lots and lots of hugs, Love, Alison |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
Thank you so much my dear Alison… You have again made me cry my friend. Thank you… Lots of love to you and I will take all of your hugs, Tammy<333 |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Pushes a box of Kleenex your way. ---- You know, I like that we seem to be here at the same time of night. Just one of those things that I like about you. A |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
I agree with Alison, the repitition works for me too because it is REAL. Everything you write here feels and is REAL and that is why it should be written and read. LOL...... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Larry, for you I will go on. ~*~ Exactly what he would want you to do, just as you would want for him. I'm glad you've found a home in which to place Larry's memory, m'dear.  |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Tammy...all of your poems about your dear Larry will resonate through space and time. He hears you. ((hugs)) from another mom. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Tammy, your sincerity while writing is obvious of true love...Larry is such a loss, I can't even imagine this could be real... huglets yann |
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AAB Member
since 2008-04-10
Posts 99Canada |
I dont think you need to change a thing in this poem. Repition is good. repition is good. "Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Tammy, I would change nary a line ~ nor a word. The raw, unfiltered emotion spills from your soul and onto the page ~ and into the hearts of your readers. I do so admire your strength ~ and your talent. God bless you, dear poetess. Love, Linda xo |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Don't cahnge a thing, Tammy. It's beautiful just the way it is. Your son is proud of you. Ida |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Tammy...There is nothing wrong with repetitions from your heart. The last line sums it all up for me..." For you Larry I will go on "...Great write and true feelings shared...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
Alison, Takes one and sniffles a thank you… Yea, I’m a serious night owl. I’ve always thought sleep was a boring, waste of time… I’m very happy to have your company Alison. Tammy<333 ----------------------------------------------- Simon, Thank you so much my friend… And I’m happy the repetition works for more than just me. Tammy<333 ----------------------------------------------- Thank you so much Sunshine. It is exactly what Larry wants and expects from me… no doubt about it. Big hugs back to you my friend. Tammy<333 ------------------------------------------- I hope and pray that he does Tina… Thank you for the reassurance and the hugs. Tammy<333 ---------------------------------------------------- Oh Yann, Thank you my friend, so much… Tammy<333 --------------------------------------------------- AAB, Thank you so much… I am happy you like it as it is. ---------------------------------------- Linda my friend, I don’t know what to say other than I am going to take everyone’s advise and leave it just as it is… Thank you so very much. Tammy<333 ------------------------------------------- Paul, Thank you so much for your kind words… Tammy<333 |
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