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David2
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0 posted 2008-04-29 11:23 PM


When Night Arrives

We whispered of a special love and sighed,
As if to speak aloud would break the spell.
We whispered of our years of pain and cried,
As tears of sweet relief from bondage fell.
We fondly spoke of tender moments past,
And swore to honor, treasure, and respect,
These memories we hold secure and fast,
That soothe us as we wonder and reflect.
We shared our secret hopes and deepest thoughts,
And leaned upon the strength of common care.
Amazed at what concern had richly wrought,
And intimate beyond whate’er we dared.

Each night we'd shed the comfort of our masks,
And dare confront whatever love would ask


[This message has been edited by David2 (04-30-2008 04:54 PM).]

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Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2008-04-29 11:43 PM


Yo David2,

This has fairly good end rhymes.  Good work.

Bobby

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2 posted 2008-04-30 03:32 PM


Wonderful write!-- Theres a lot to know from this poem..

Lot's of insight and yet, you still did it very well poetically!



ARCTIC WIND

Nan
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3 posted 2008-04-30 04:39 PM


How nice to see you posting, David..

This is an exquisite sonnet - Thanks for the pleasure of reading it..


Munda
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4 posted 2008-04-30 07:26 PM


I ditto all that Nan said! An excellent sonnet and a pleasure to read.
Larrysmom
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5 posted 2008-04-30 08:14 PM


So heartfelt and beautifully spoken...

Tammy>333

AAB
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6 posted 2008-04-30 08:55 PM


You gave me chills in the best kinda way

"Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride

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