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rad802
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0 posted 2008-04-27 11:45 AM


In the absolute blackness of uncertainty
an unexpected flash brings sight.
A welcome guide
in this our plight.

In the absolute silence of conformity
a well-directed spark ignites
a ray of hope
in this our plight.

Straining, striving, starving, stumbling,
craving, crying crawling crumbling
in a serious deficiency
of love and lights reality

In the scheme of things the Lord knows that I need to see.
He’s been the only source of light
to show the path
from this our plight.

Rick Delmonico

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Denise
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1 posted 2008-04-28 10:34 PM


Great message, expressed well, Rick!

Earth's crammed with heaven, and every common bush afire with God, but only he who sees takes off his shoes.
Elizabeth Barrett Browning

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2008-04-29 08:06 AM


yes, I enjoyed this too Rick! love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

gilead
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3 posted 2008-04-29 09:29 AM


A marvelous lyric, beautifully crafted! I like the repetition of the refrain, " . . . this our plight" and the alliteration of the consonants     "s" and "c" in the third stanza. Hats off, my friend!

Art

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