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Joe Crow
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0 posted 2008-04-25 07:36 PM


I started writing this a few years back and while I don't know what happened to the original version the main theme sticks in my head so I wrote it again even though I'm pretty sure it still ain't finished.

One of these Days


One of these days I'm going back home
and take me a walk where the green grass grows
build me a house for this love of mine
by the sycamore trees, the cedars and pines

a sweet little house where we both can live
to share all the love that we have to give
a white picket fence with flowers on the sill
down by the creek Granddaddy's old still

come on pretty baby don't you want to go
I'll take ya there with me down the old dirt road
I'll give you a kiss where it feels so good
we'll do all the things we only wish we could

push back the veil reveal the mystery
my Woman right beside me making history
singing sweet songs the broken heart heals
the hand of the Almighty will be breaking the seals

One of these days I'm gonna marry you
take ya by the hand when you say I do
build us a bed with the sky up above
fill your arms with a heart full of love

a big front porch with twelve rocking chairs
the laughter of children will be filling the air
a well tended garden with food on the vine
I bring these gifts to this love of mine

One of these days I'll be calling your name
trying your heart and tugging your reins
then you'll know it is with you I stand
as we make our way to the promised land.

come on pretty baby don't you want to go?
I'll take ya there with me down the old dirt road
I'll give you a kiss where it feels so good
we'll do all the things we only wish we could....

"May the things I know be limited only by my imagination"

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2008-04-25 07:44 PM


"One of these days I'm gonna marry you
take ya by the hand when you say I do
build us a bed with the sky up above
fill your arms with a heart full of love

a big front porch with twelve rocking chairs
the laughter of children will be filling the air
a well tended garden with food on the vine
I bring these gifts to this love of mine"

~ Oh, Joe! What woman could ask for more?!? I hope that all of your dreams came true!

Actually, I wanted to quote the entire poem! It was so tender, romantic, and downright heart-touching!

Big hug,
Linda


Joe Crow
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2 posted 2008-04-25 07:57 PM


Thanks Linda, your poetry moves me too!

I was thinking when I read your new one how similar our themes really are and I bet if we ever had a really deep conversation our dreams for this life would fall right in line.


                            Joe

shyvl
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3 posted 2008-04-25 08:08 PM


"come on pretty baby don't you want to go?
I'll take ya there with me down the old dirt road
I'll give you a kiss where it feels so good
we'll do all the things we only wish we could...."  What a great sense of cadence in this stanza.  I like the fact that it was repeated in the poem.  Thanks for sharing
sharyn

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4 posted 2008-04-25 08:30 PM


Dear kindred spirit, re your comment to me, I do believe you are correct in that assumption! That is probably why effjayel thought that we would appreciate each other's poetry! ~ and he was right!


Linda

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-04-25 09:16 PM


oh Joe, this is so lovely!  It could even be a song   just beautiful... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Artic Wind
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6 posted 2008-04-25 10:54 PM


I agree with RDB!

ARCTIC WIND

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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7 posted 2008-04-28 06:05 AM


*bump* love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

r v wooo
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8 posted 2008-04-28 09:21 AM


a warm poem, joe. the sharing of love is an important part of the journey...and when a story is written, it is important that one does not die alone.
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9 posted 2008-04-28 09:27 AM


Joe~
Something nostalgic in this read likes me~

It is a nice read aloud piece too~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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gilead
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10 posted 2008-04-28 11:36 AM


A noble dream from the heart---may it come true!

Art

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