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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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Michigan

0 posted 2008-04-25 05:29 PM




I could say a million truths,
Make a million moves,
But that doesn’t constituent an inner truth.

A truth of the street seas
Of cell phones and wide range cars
That trickle from the blonde hair youths,
That tint their windows
From the dark blocks,
The crying seas
Of babies pale skins tearing
Through the nights ripped skin.

Jackie’s sleeves cant hide her tracks,
Tracks of addiction,
Where the doorknob won’t lock,
Won’t fade the knives and glocks
That trifle and stifle
The kids round cheeks of a tomorrow
That never comes,
Never drums anymore
Through the shallow streets
I walk through.

Where girls can bend their skirts and fur boots,
How the sun doesn’t shine the same way to each of us,
And my fear is,
I wont be able to change what I see,
But what I feel is stronger than anything I believe.


© Copyright 2008 Tomer Fried - All Rights Reserved
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-04-25 07:25 PM


powerful but dark, this write is compelling...I chose the following 3 lines as my favorites

"Tracks of addiction,
Where the doorknob won’t lock,"

"How the sun doesn’t shine the same way to each of us"

"I wont be able to change what I see,
But what I feel is stronger than anything I believe"

Caliban
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since 2008-04-23
Posts 57

2 posted 2008-04-25 09:43 PM


Very good write. I especially like the opening lines.

Muna seasaimid le ceartas, ní sheasfaidh ceartas linn - Francis Bacon

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2008-04-26 08:50 AM


Enjoyed!



ARCTIC WIND

Seoulair
Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea
4 posted 2008-04-26 12:59 PM


Powerful voice spoke from the images. True fact. Touch me deeply.
And my fear is,
I wont be able to change what I see,
But what I feel is stronger than anything I believe.
  profound!!!

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