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poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-04-25 08:55 AM

Ride on a fallen trophy(what I saw at the time of a storm)
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The storm enters in the roads of mankind
Just then. Just then I see the horse.
The pale rider. The rider is in odd
With the sinewy grace it yields.
A fallen beauty from trophy-room past.
Storm takes a stroll down the city.
Lanes and lame lives are rolling into one,
Just a rider with dirt in hair
A naked upper part with clotted earth.
The horse closes its eye to storm.
It blurs details of belly and hunger.
A blur is the scene of the horse
Galloping to take its rider beyond
Petty days of a mundane life.

clever talks delay friendship!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2008-04-25 10:15 AM

Ku... you have such magic in your words... I enjoyed this very much... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2008-04-25 12:16 PM

Pale Rider (it recalls me Clint eastwood WESTERN )

Very nice work

yann

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2008-04-25 01:26 PM

Your visions are amazing, dear Ku, and you share them in this impressive poem with your usual mastery.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

4 posted 2008-04-25 01:58 PM

Absolutely beautiful. What a grand view!!!
Thunder horse storm. enjoyed the reaqd, my dear friend.

simon
Member

since 2008-01-14

Posts 440
London, England

5 posted 2008-04-25 02:46 PM

I always enjoy reading your colourful and original writing. This is no exception...

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2008-04-25 07:47 PM

nice write...my favorite part:

"A blur is the scene of the horse
Galloping to take its rider beyond
Petty days of a mundane life"

astounding visuals...great imagery

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

7 posted 2008-04-25 08:05 PM

"A blur is the scene of the horse
Galloping to take its rider beyond
Petty days of a mundane life." Your writing also has the effect of taking me out of the mundane. Beautiful imagery here. Thanks for sharing
sharyn

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