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ILoveTheRain
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0 posted 2008-04-24 03:40 PM



The memories of you
Displace the water as it flows
Down into a river at rest
That symbolizes my love for you


This is as far as I can get with this...any ideas?

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Caliban
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since 2008-04-23
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1 posted 2008-04-25 10:31 PM


Hey Rain,
I'm not very good at this but maybe this will help.

Further they spill down
Thru still waters deeply running
Bright facets that reflect
The passions of your love

Hope that does something for you. I really enjoy your work. Keep writing
Alex

Muna seasaimid le ceartas, nĂ­ sheasfaidh ceartas linn - Francis Bacon

ILoveTheRain
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2 posted 2008-04-25 10:48 PM


Interesting. It gives me some idea of where to go with it. Thank you
And I'm very happy to hear that you like my work

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