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jody5
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0 posted 2008-04-23 10:19 PM


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I have a broken spirit

I left my mom at age four

The Social Worker came

She took me out the door.


I have a broken spirit

My mom has gone away

They tell me she's in rehab

I know that she won't stay.


I have a broken spirit

I know my mom does too

We were too close together

now I am really blue


I have a broken spirit

Dad is gone for good

He only wanted to hurt her

so she drank the pain away


I have a broken spirit

I have lost my mom for now

I hope someday I'll find her

It makes me cry out-loud


I have a broken spirit

Divorce is a hurtful thing

What it does to the children

Makes them feel that they're to blame.



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1 posted 2008-04-23 10:43 PM


I had a mother who drank also. My mother and father didn't divorce. They just stayed together and fought it out for what seemed like an eternity. Take some advise from one who has been there. Forget the past and try to build a healthy future and a different kind of life for yourself. Your ability to write about your problems will be a great help to you.
                                  Ida

Larrysmom
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2 posted 2008-04-23 11:03 PM


This is very sad… But you can build a healthy future as Ida says.

Tammy<333

jody5
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3 posted 2008-04-24 02:29 AM


Thank you both for your replys.  I wrote an article about the foster care system as I grew up in it.  I wrote this poem to go with it to show people how it felt to leave my mother.  I am over it now, but I can still get in touch with those feelings.

Hugs Kimberly


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4 posted 2008-04-24 08:12 AM


Kimberly~
You've penned the pain gracefully~

*Huglets* to you dear lady~
~*Marge*~

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r v wooo
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5 posted 2008-04-24 12:42 PM


of all the things i have read, that you have written, this is the most intriguing!
Artic Wind
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6 posted 2008-04-24 03:51 PM


That is a very sad memory to feel and see about leaving your mother

ARCTIC WIND

Robert E. Jordan
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7 posted 2008-04-24 05:28 PM


Jody5,

This is well done.  Foster care is the pits.  Now that you're out, make sure you look out for number one--you.

Bobby

shyvl
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8 posted 2008-04-24 06:18 PM


Jody5--Yes it is good to write about life's sorrows, it helps us heal.  I hope the best things for your future.
sharyn

jody5
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9 posted 2008-04-24 08:10 PM


Marge;  You are such a great person Thank you for your comment.  r v wood; I am honored that you found my poem intriguing.
Artic Wind; It was sad at the time and it gave me an understanding of my own life as I also experienced divorce. Bobby; you are right about foster care and I have a goal to write a book about it and call the book EXPOSED.  Sharyn:  It has helped me to heal and it helps others to know that they are not alone.  Thank you for your blessing.


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