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shaggy
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since 2008-04-17
Posts 9


0 posted 2008-04-21 05:43 PM


I would like everyone to know that being a new member all the responses I've received are very much appreciated. I didn't expect such a great welcome and I look forward to reading all your poetry.


That backdrop of
‘Let’s forget the world’—
Turned into that
Goodnight feeling,
Of how nebulas explode
When our bodies collide.
And we take deep breaths
Under a seizure of colors—
So to fill ourselves
With warm embrace
Of renegade comets
And swirls of galaxies,
Only, I realize
Under this cosmic dance
Your eyes—
Brighter than the emeralds
Off the shore
Of the Milky Way—
Hold me to you
And I feel
These strange words,
Mouth forming syllables—
I’d swallow
The world,
With my yawn—
If you only asked.


© Copyright 2008 shaggy - All Rights Reserved
Larrysmom
Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533
Florida, USA
1 posted 2008-04-21 08:13 PM


Excellent write Shaggy… Very sensual.

Tammy<333

steavenr
Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

2 posted 2008-04-21 08:30 PM


charming write with great visuals
shaggy
New Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 9

3 posted 2008-04-21 09:55 PM


I was going for sensual with this poem and I spent quite a bit of time working on the images so thank you both for the replies.
Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2008-04-22 03:01 AM


I like your writing, Shaggy. Interesting name.
                                Ida

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2008-04-22 10:30 AM


  love it.

and welcome, since I seem to have missed your entrance (if I didn't miss it, don't tell me, old age is depressing enough without tangible proof)..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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