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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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0 posted 2008-04-18 08:05 AM


Thoughts for my young cousin drowned in a fishing tragedy nearly two years ago.. aged only 9.

I am so scared mommy
I can’t see your face
I’m lost in this darkness
And have no space
I need to touch you mommy
I want to hold you tight
But I’m struggling for breath
And I’m losing the fight
Why can’t I breathe mommy
Why can’t I smile
Why can’t I just keep living awhile
Will God take care of me
Will God be nice
Will he mind if I tell him I don’t like rice
I have to go now mommy
I have to fly
But I’ll come and visit
If you promise not to cry

I love you mommy….


Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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inkedgoddess
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1 posted 2008-04-18 08:32 AM


sorrowful write
thru child eyes
the cries of innocence

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2008-04-18 09:35 AM


Dear RDB,

That's a very sad poem about a sad event.  Some get taken early.  It's a dice roll for all of us.

Bobby  

2islander2
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3 posted 2008-04-18 09:52 AM


Hello Roniece, that's so sad, i share sorrows with you.

    yann

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4 posted 2008-04-18 10:21 AM


RDB...Heart touching. Brought tears to my eyes...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-04-18 10:49 AM


Thank you MsInky, Bobby, Yann & Paul for your very lovely comments... he was such a beautiful soul... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Seoulair
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6 posted 2008-04-18 12:47 PM


very,very sad. very sad. the loss  and the pain.
passing shadows
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7 posted 2008-04-18 05:14 PM


gosh Roniece


Joe Crow
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8 posted 2008-04-18 07:36 PM


Roneice,

That's so sad, I have no words to say but my heart goes out to you and yours.

                        Joe

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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9 posted 2008-04-19 04:22 AM


thank you Seoulair, Dixie and Joe... I appreciate your words of comfort... hopefully he didn't suffer too much... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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10 posted 2008-04-19 06:21 AM


((((Roniece))))
This is extremely poignant, your heart shows in all its beauty.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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11 posted 2008-04-19 09:50 AM


thanks for sharing these thoughts from your heart...James
Larrysmom
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12 posted 2008-04-19 02:23 PM


OH Roniece, this has made me cry… it’s so damn unfair. This world makes no sense to me sometimes. You have written this in a way that I can FEEL myself as your cousin, scared and drowning… I’m so sorry for you and your family’s loss of a beautiful child so full of life…

Tammy<333

LindsayP
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13 posted 2008-04-19 09:55 PM



Dear Roniece, my heart feels for you my dear, For one who is always so happy and

caring of others, it just doesn't seem right
My very sincere sympathy. God Bless.

Lindsay

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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14 posted 2008-04-20 04:16 AM


Margherita, James, Tammy & Lindsay... thank you all, I appreciate your comments. A beautiful soul too young to die... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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