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midnightdreamer
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Roy,ut

0 posted 2008-04-14 09:37 PM



When we’re together I feel safe
When we’re together I feel loved
When we’re together I feel real
When we’re together I feel important
When we’re together I feel like nothing can go wrong
When we’re together I feel conquering the world
When we’re together I feel I can face the world
But when we’re apart I feel alone
And can’t find my way
I’m trying to find my key….which is someone to love
When ever your gone I’m thinking of you
You’re my world
I just wanted you to know
I love you

black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show.

© Copyright 2008 Mariah Paige - All Rights Reserved
hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
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at the beach... i wish
1 posted 2008-04-14 09:44 PM


great write

JJ

midnightdreamer
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since 2008-02-03
Posts 309
Roy,ut
2 posted 2008-04-14 09:50 PM


thanks!!!
shyvl
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since 2008-04-11
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texas, usa
3 posted 2008-04-14 10:27 PM


An intense expression of emotion.  A couple of typos you might want to check like whenever instead of when ever.  I enjoyed reading your work.
sharyn

hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
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at the beach... i wish
4 posted 2008-04-14 11:14 PM


you havent writtin in a while have you? if so could you tell me the titles i really like your work!!

JJ

midnightdreamer
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Roy,ut
5 posted 2008-04-15 08:24 PM


thanks guys!! no i guess i haven't written in awhile. i don't write much in open poetry. if you look in the pages of Dark poems then you'll find some in there. first couple of pages.
midnightdreamer

black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show.

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