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Alison
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0 posted 2008-04-14 12:46 PM



It’s a lonely road that you walk on, I bet
The center line dotted with question marks
that no map can decipher.
One hand beckons you onward,
one clings to hold you back.
And in between is loneliness.

I want to hold on to you and keep you here.
My eyes show this deep longing
then, again, they well with tears.
We talk our goodbyes with urgency,
each day counted, cherished.
And tears water our eyes.

Shhhh, you say,

shhh, don’t cry; but sometimes I cry silently.
Each sob stifled until resistance crumbles,
another emotional battle lost.
Each poem has you woven in it;
your name whispers off my tongue.
And I already miss you.

I already miss you with intensity that hurts.
I close my eyes and write poetry,
thoughts flowing like those damn tears;
my eyes are too tired to see.
Now we talk about ‘when’ not ‘if’.
And we cry together.

Shhh, you say,

shhh, don’t cry; but we still cry silently.

---

Alison

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1 posted 2008-04-14 01:50 AM


Beautiful write ...the pain is so real and heartfelt.

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2 posted 2008-04-14 01:59 AM


the first stanza is wonderful! i love the road imagery.
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2008-04-14 02:32 AM


((((((hugs)))))) you my sweet Ali-girl.. glad you are still writing... I'm here for you... love RDB xx

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

2islander2
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4 posted 2008-04-14 03:08 AM


Touched  by your poem, so emotional and close ....


  have a nice day

    yann

  

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5 posted 2008-04-14 05:45 AM


ms ali-san, well done little one...
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6 posted 2008-04-14 05:48 AM


(((huggsss))  Well done, Alison...

I am here...

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7 posted 2008-04-14 07:56 AM


Saying goodbye can be quite painful-but you express it well.  Thank you
sharyn

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8 posted 2008-04-14 09:47 AM


Gosh Alison, you have me crying now too and I suppose for all the many people and things I've missed during the course of my life so far.  I guess you did good here, gal, to make the reader feel the sadness of goodbye and to make them cry silently.

I hope for you that the "when" is sooner than you think.

Helen

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9 posted 2008-04-14 02:41 PM


A, Intensely beautiful, I just wanted to say we feel for you & are thinking of you.....J xx
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10 posted 2008-04-14 04:33 PM


Nice writing...James
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11 posted 2008-04-14 08:18 PM


While reading your poem my breath caught and my heart literally ached.

If we didn't love with all our heart we wouldn't know
these feelings you write of.

And I felt your words deeply.

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12 posted 2008-04-14 11:17 PM


This is gorgeous Alison… so gently and lovingly written.

Tammy<333

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13 posted 2008-04-14 11:38 PM


Yo Alison,

This is very good Hon.  Try and remember though, crying doesn't pay, there's not much money in it.

Bobby

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14 posted 2008-04-15 01:16 AM


All of you have touched me in ways that you may not realize.  The kindness and support is amazing.

Bobby, tears are healing too.  

I wish you all a good couple of weeks as I am going to be gone.

If I can peek in, I will.

With love,
Alison

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15 posted 2008-04-16 04:28 PM


O, dear, O dear.
How visceral, how aking, how deep
is the longing here,
how personal, how universal
how easy to identify with it, it is for me.
J

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16 posted 2008-04-16 06:04 PM


nice write
LindsayP
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17 posted 2008-04-17 01:28 AM



Dear Alison that is so good,

A very poignant post, much enjoyed.

Lindsay

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18 posted 2008-04-18 05:57 PM


obviously a very 'real,' heart-felt, personal, emotional 'write' of fine merit!

serious applause!!

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19 posted 2008-04-23 01:16 AM


Alison, your sadness is palpable and I could feel it deeply as I read your words that were emotionally charged.

Sending a loving and compassionate hug,

Linda

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20 posted 2008-04-23 06:27 PM


And so close to you, you make me feel,
How paradoxic that geography and circumstance
would keep you so very far away ...
Shhhhhhh conspiratorial whisper.
I'm turning off all my hearing and FM sound equipment
so that I can listen to the tidal rhythms,
of your emptying and filling heart.
Love,
Jaime

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21 posted 2008-04-23 06:39 PM


Your thoughts are beautiful but so very sad, Alison. My heart hurts for you and your words touch me deeply. I don't know want else to say.
                               Ida

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22 posted 2008-04-23 06:41 PM


Emotion filled Write!

ARCTIC WIND

Jaime Fradera
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23 posted 2008-04-23 07:23 PM


Alison! O, Alison!
well okay did I already reply once maybe twice ... let's see.
Ivery time I look at it makes me feel I am wit you.  And can be with you anytime.  That is the magic that transcends the tree barriers that so often keep us so painfuly apart.  You jump through the hoops of Time Circumstance and Space, and know that someone somewhere loves me even if they can't be here in actual person.
sorry in advanced if I decide I have to reply to this again! :---------)
Spring is springing in the Arctic?
Love Jaime

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24 posted 2008-04-23 08:07 PM


All I can say is, this is beautiful. Thank-you.
Alison
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25 posted 2008-06-19 03:53 AM


Thank you all.

I still cry
I miss him lots

and as I go back tonight
and read here
I see how much people care

He died
and I cry.

That's about it, I guess.

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