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NeonKnight
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since 2008-04-12
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New South Wales, Australia

0 posted 2008-04-12 07:46 PM



Fire of Life

Dark embers of the cold dark night
left bitter in the breeze, shivering in the cold
A dream that once was a fiery light
A passion for a past yet to be told

Bursting out of the frozen fire
A flame so bright it burns to life
A passion for a frightened pyre
No need to be afraid of the pain
It will grow and feed upon the mire
The seed of life born and died

SB - 13/4/08

© Copyright 2008 Simon Butler - All Rights Reserved
shyvl
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since 2008-04-11
Posts 531
texas, usa
1 posted 2008-04-12 07:56 PM


Your imagery is very strong and leads to a strong emotional response.  Thanks for sharing
sharyn

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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2 posted 2008-04-12 07:59 PM


No need to be afraid of the pain
It will grow and feed upon the mire
The seed of life born and died


how true...and yes, very powerfully written

NeonKnight
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since 2008-04-12
Posts 36
New South Wales, Australia
3 posted 2008-04-13 12:06 PM


thank you very much for the replies. Im glad you liked it.
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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Sydney, Australia
4 posted 2008-04-13 06:52 AM


Simon... you have a beautiful gift.. thanks for sharing... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
5 posted 2008-04-13 07:53 AM


"No need to be afraid of the pain
It will grow and feed upon the mire
The seed of life born and died"

Yes, that's telling it like it is.  Well done!

SkaaDee
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since 2008-04-07
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Canada
6 posted 2008-04-13 08:36 AM


yeah, this is good.


NeonKnight
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since 2008-04-12
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New South Wales, Australia
7 posted 2008-04-13 05:32 PM


Thank you very much everyone for your replies it means a lot to me.
Seoulair
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since 2008-03-27
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Seoul S.Korea
8 posted 2008-04-14 01:51 AM


This is beautiful. Love the read.
NeonKnight
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since 2008-04-12
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New South Wales, Australia
9 posted 2008-04-14 06:08 PM


thank you very much for reading
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