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xTr3m3sT
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0 posted 2008-04-11 05:17 PM


All of these false representations of my real self,
It's like I got an emotional costume, one hanging on every shelf,
Everyone titled for a different purpose,
Only problem is, my actual self never does surface.

Many different personalities but never my real one,
I'm masked and afraid that people will find me out,
So I fake my emotions to everyone,
When in reality I just want to shout,

And scream and yell,
With no one to listen,
Whenever I would get out of the hole I fell,
And every time I had fallen I got weakened.


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hiddensmiles
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1 posted 2008-04-11 06:42 PM


great write i like this alot you should write it on teen poetry.

JJ

hiddensmiles
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2 posted 2008-04-11 06:43 PM


(LIbrary)

JJ

xTr3m3sT
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3 posted 2008-04-11 06:50 PM


Thank you =D Glad you are a fan of my work :]
Marchmadness
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4 posted 2008-04-12 12:30 PM


Try a gentle approach. People will listen to you when you listen to them. Screaming and yelling is anoying.
                                     Ida

NeonKnight
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5 posted 2008-04-12 01:01 AM


I rather enjoyed that poem, nice work
HopeS
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6 posted 2008-04-12 01:39 AM


I think many will relate to this , we hide so much at times , but writing helps bring out our true emotions

Hope

Larrysmom
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7 posted 2008-04-12 06:57 PM


I love this one! Excellent write. The real you is in there, you just need to “feel” him out…

Tammy<333

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8 posted 2008-04-14 11:38 AM


You know, it is kind of like having a dirty window (grins -- hang in here with me, okay?).  At first, you don't really notice it is dirty; then one day you realize that no one can see in, but you can't see out.  Know what I mean?  The window is a barrier instead of an advantage.  So, maybe you clean a tiny corner and peer out - still no one can really see in - and you feel safe. Then you clean a bit more ... and a bit more ... and yes ... a bit more.  You start seeing all this beauty.  You see things you had missed.  Maybe the sunset.  Maybe dogs playing in your yard.  You see things that make you laugh.  

And, one day you notice that people can see in -- but it doesn't really bother you any more.  Maybe you smile as you see them or .. oh my GOD .. you wave!!!! (smiles) .. and then one day you talk to one of them and then another.  Before you know it you are thinking of them as friends.

We are sometimes dirty windows.  We don't look out and see the fear of others until we wipe away some of our own.  Then we realize all the beauty in this world - in other people - and we grow.  We grow as friends - and we grow within our selves.

Take care, my friend - and thank you for cleaning your window for us.

Alison

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