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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-04-11 05:53 AM



today may be just elevens again
a blending of blendigo
arms length metaphors perhaps
leaning on a bar sipping time

letting the gurgling sounds
of a swallow building her nest
cause one to layer her layers
less deeply than values

contemplation of entwining wine
with the more solid daydreams
and putting her fingers together
between each other's strangers

does god really give us signs
or do we build them ourselves there
at the tinkertoy disney town
where only we can make happen happen

and if I said I dare you, would you

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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2008-04-11 06:35 AM


hmmm... I think, if you dared everyone on here Mr Daark.. they most likely would say yes! enjoyed this ... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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2 posted 2008-04-11 10:20 AM


quote:
does god really give us signs
or do we build them ourselves there...

...and if I said I dare you, would you


y'know, without a ? I can only wonder
at the question left unspoken.

You've got to lay it out, y'know...





Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-04-11 03:37 PM


ms r&b, thanks lady friend..so what was your answer?

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ms sun, sometimes it is fun to just ask and watch the shocked look..but something about planting the thought perhaps?  thanks hon

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4 posted 2008-04-11 04:32 PM


is it the possibility
of walking on water that
keeps us from drowning
or do we rise like
communion wafers
on the tides
of open mouths,
where we melt
into each other
for our salvation.

Indigo

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5 posted 2008-04-11 05:01 PM


ms indi, perhaps begging for forgiveness as we teeter from our swollen fences?  thanks babe
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6 posted 2008-04-11 05:26 PM


Too true, D, too true.



Even a raised eyebrow would probably make you grin.



Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2008-04-11 05:39 PM


ms sun...as long as it was followed by a wink?


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8 posted 2008-04-11 06:29 PM


enjoyed
Margherita
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9 posted 2008-04-12 04:36 AM


Such great imagery and so much to consider in this one, dear D.!

I am positive that God "does give us signs" and it is quite wonderful to be aware of this.

Love,
Margherita

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10 posted 2008-04-12 05:46 AM


Assuming that wasn't a hypothetical question my answer would be yes. There was a time,,,,,,
I like this part the best.....

"does god really give us signs
or do we build them ourselves there
at the tinkertoy disney town
where only we can make happen happen"


Just perfect!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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11 posted 2008-04-12 06:52 AM


ms vandana, thanks lady for the eyes


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ms mar, thank you babe for reading and touching too


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ms angel, thank you julie for letting your thoughts drift and the yes too.

LeeJ
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12 posted 2008-04-12 11:05 AM


I would

your words are beautiful as always D.

Lee J.

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13 posted 2008-04-12 04:57 PM


ms leej...you are lovely as always ...thanks babe
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14 posted 2008-04-12 08:58 PM


This one makes me feel unsure… questioning, and yet at the same time confident…

Tammy<333

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15 posted 2008-04-13 07:11 AM


ms larry'smom...then just say yes and see where it leads you...thanks ms
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16 posted 2008-04-14 01:38 AM



enjoyed the read.

Dark Stranger
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17 posted 2008-04-14 05:47 AM


friend souelair, thanks for the read
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18 posted 2008-04-15 12:01 PM


Dunno, D.  Sometimes, I am not one to say 'no' but I will change the subject.  (grins) - but that's just me.  

I really love these lines

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does god really give us signs
or do we build them ourselves there
at the tinkertoy disney town
where only we can make happen happen
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Definitely something to think about.

A


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19 posted 2008-04-15 06:02 AM


ms ali-san, go ahead and say it..my ear muffs are on...thanks little one
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