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SkaaDee
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0 posted 2008-04-09 10:43 PM


the moth on the desk
lead the annual parade for Spring's arrival.
barely remembering, it awkwardly stumbled
through air. the summer breeze
was in its wind
- in the effort of its wings:
the sound of barbeque,
the smell of the pool.

why did I kill it ?

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Seoulair
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1 posted 2008-04-09 10:50 PM


Very good.
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2 posted 2008-04-10 08:15 AM


Very clever...
Enjoying your poetic style

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3 posted 2008-04-10 08:44 AM


Scotty~
Most delightful write~
A real thinker~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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4 posted 2008-04-10 07:17 PM


I enjoyed this so much.

It's true--the moth seems to lead the parade, huh?

(Sometimes our Junebugs show up in May--and I know I'm in for a particularly grueling summer)

This was refreshing, Skaa.

SkaaDee
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5 posted 2008-04-10 09:40 PM


Such warm comments - thank you.

June bugs in May.
Nice line.

how about -
"Summer is in a hurry, I saw Junebugs in May."


Larrysmom
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6 posted 2008-04-10 10:55 PM


Wow! This made me smile so wide and then just snatched it away… I love this!

Tammy<333

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7 posted 2008-04-10 11:10 PM


nice write!!enjoyed

JJ

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8 posted 2008-04-11 01:39 AM


Enjoyed.
     Ida

gilead
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9 posted 2008-04-11 12:23 PM


A very fine, thoughtful poem. My response to the question is this---the preemptive strike, an enterprise unique to humankind, whether insects under the swatter, or bombs raining from the dark sky.

Art

SkaaDee
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10 posted 2008-04-11 12:40 PM



I don't have an answer for the question.
I was intrigued by the irony.
It has been an unusually long winter where I am and one would think I would be  thrilled to see the Spring parade.  
Thanks again for the comments.


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