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spiked
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0 posted 2008-04-09 10:14 AM


Envisioned in my mind I see
The fragments of the life we lead
Where shattered words
Are left in place
And words of love
All fall from grace
Patterns of a damaged view
Where once we loved
We just construe
That what we mean is not the way
I look to find a better way
Break the binds
That led us wrong
Redefine to make us strong
Relax and not look for that pain
That last word said
That does contain
The lyric of some angry thought
We said instead of loves report
I look inside take a second wind
Before I’ll speak a sarcastic whim
When anger flies I’ll walk away
Count my thoughts before I say
And come back in to say I care
Say I love instead of tear
A piece of the bind that we use
To live our life already confused
By gestures, words and spears we throw
A solemn vow that I will show
That I am yet a better man
Than that you’ve ever known.
With thoughts of you I say this line
I’ll love you true all through time
I’m sorry for misguided acts
The way our love has gone off track
I’ll strive to find a better way
To show you how I feel



© Copyright 2008 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
Seoulair
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since 2008-03-27
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Seoul S.Korea
1 posted 2008-04-09 11:53 AM


felt the emotion. Very nice

Love the read.

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
2 posted 2008-04-09 03:57 PM


Thank you
Virtual Abyss
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since 2008-04-09
Posts 52
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3 posted 2008-04-10 01:18 AM


Spiked,

A lot of feeling.  Now is a nice time for  reflection (for me).  Thanks!

V/r,

Virtual Abyss


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2008-04-10 01:55 PM


It's good to see the real you? *laughing* In any case, George said to say "hey" and that Brian would also love to hear from you.

(People worry yanno.)

btw, if you happen to need a pitchfork, I've retired mine. (I've got a tail too, also retired.)

You look good in red though.

And you always did write best from your heart. Keep showing it like this, and you might lose your status in Hell. *chuckling*

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
5 posted 2008-04-11 09:24 AM


this was a wonderful read.. wonderful!  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Larrysmom
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since 2008-04-03
Posts 533
Florida, USA
6 posted 2008-04-12 05:29 PM


This is awesome… made me feel rushed to show love.

Tammy<333

passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2008-04-12 08:18 PM


great stuff here!

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
8 posted 2008-04-16 09:38 PM


Haven't had much time to browse here but was a nice surprise to see so many comments. thanks so much. Rich
serenity i will try to find time to call them at the plant see whats up.
thanks

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