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shabby rooster |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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Shabby rooster ----------------- The smell of burnt milk in the morning, Parables of domesticities Rise from the night of an unslept bed. The tired ring of a sweating land-phone That you cannot quite ignore and still… Let it ring all the while the shower Wasting your treasured dark exhaustion. A shaft of light is waiting outside. Now again you have to watch your feet. clever talks delay friendship! |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
wonderful. love every word of it. And sense the sadness and hope. enjoyed |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Ku, this is clever, psychologically interesting and as usual very well rendered. treasured dark exhaustion now again you have to watch your feet my favorite lines, besides the "shaft of light", ready to brighten your day. Love it, you are very good, my friend. Love, Margherita  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You capture quite well the emotional edges of light and dark, and the space where they intertwine. |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Loved this & loved the title too... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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