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2islander2
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0 posted 2008-03-29 04:49 AM


The poets on the web
are bees in a hive,
they produce poems
as sweet as honey
and their thoughts
pollinate the mind.

© Copyright 2008 yann rolland - All Rights Reserved
2islander2
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1 posted 2008-03-29 04:52 AM


hello, i would like to ask a question :
Is there a verb in english which could remplace  to make pollination ?

   yann

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2008-03-29 05:12 AM


well I think the last line should read...

pollinate the mind...

nice thoughts here Yann   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Marchmadness
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3 posted 2008-03-29 11:13 AM


Hi yann This is a very good poem. Perhaps this would help.
"they produce poems as sweet as honey
and their thoughts pollinate the mind."
                                Ida

2islander2
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4 posted 2008-03-29 01:08 PM


Hello Roniece, hello Ida, i'm glad you helped me, now this is a collegial (collective) poem, i enjoy that...

   huglets

    yann

Margherita
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5 posted 2008-03-29 07:14 PM


I love the end result very much!

Nice thought, dear Yann!


Love,
Margherita

Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2008-03-29 07:20 PM


Yann,

This is a good poem.

When I lived in the country I had ten hive.  I liked to open the hives, because the bees all over the place reminded me of the city.

Bobby

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7 posted 2008-03-29 08:05 PM


yann

You write a sweet poem, like honey.  I like this a lot.

Alison

effjayel
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8 posted 2008-03-30 11:29 AM


Good job Yann....John
2islander2
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9 posted 2008-03-31 10:51 AM


Thank you John, Alison, Bobby and
Margherita, i wrote this poem cause this site (PIP) is like a hive...Always busy...You miss a day you miss 40 poems and good ones...I feel like a bee....

   yann

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