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poddarku
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0 posted 2008-03-24 10:57 AM



God in a hot afternoon
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Sun is leaping over the cracked fence.
Light feet of sunlight
Wakes a sick horse chomping a mouthful.
Sun, quite full of youth…
The horse looks up and returns to food.
To a lean belly
Grass is god and love, life is chomping.
Young sun trespasses
To a stretch of land of green twilight
Where he shall meet moon.
To a searing life, moonshine is god.

clever talks delay friendship!

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2008-03-24 03:23 PM


Enjoyed...James
Sunshine
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2 posted 2008-03-24 03:29 PM


...life is chomping.

I had to smile at that, Poddar.

Thank you for this smile.


Robert E. Jordan
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3 posted 2008-03-24 04:57 PM


Poddarku,

This poem is smooth.  I like the idea of "green twilight".

Bobby

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Gaia
4 posted 2008-03-24 07:33 PM


Wonderful imagery, Poddar!
I've seen those horses, intent on 'chomping'
in the sunshine.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-03-25 08:29 AM


ok! I am now unsure whether to call you Poddar or Ku??     but I very much enjoyed this poem of yours...   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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6 posted 2008-03-25 12:08 PM


quote:
To a lean belly
Grass is god and love, life is chomping.



Just so! Very expressive write, holding beauty and philosophical depth, dearest Ku!

Love,
Margherita

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