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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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Sydney, Australia

0 posted 2008-03-24 07:06 AM

You asked me when
and I said soon
you asked me how
and I said where
you asked me why
and I said because
no-one lives forever
and memories are made of moments
that count for all to see

and then you smiled and the soon was kept for later….

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2008-03-24 08:01 AM

Simple joy

Marchmadness
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2 posted 2008-03-24 10:16 AM

Good one, Roniece.
Ida

HopeS
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Perth Western Australia

3 posted 2008-03-24 10:45 AM

Questions and answers so wonderfully expressed

Hope

poddarku
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india

4 posted 2008-03-24 10:52 AM

this should be widely read. it is simple( which i consider as a basic aspect of a good writting) it is crafty and i think it epical.

clever talks delay friendship!

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

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5 posted 2008-03-24 11:07 AM

Dear RDB,

This is nice enough, however, it really would be better if you dropped the needless "and"s.

Bobby

2islander2
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by the sea

6 posted 2008-03-24 02:38 PM

Hello roniece, it is a pleasure to read you and share your thoughts,

yann

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2008-03-24 03:07 PM

Roniece~
So simple ... so simply BEAUTIFUL~
And that is so like the poetess in you
and I like that very much~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

secondhanddreampoet
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8 posted 2008-03-24 07:31 PM

a very pleasant 'write!'...

I am especially fond of the ending lines:

"memories are made of moments
that count for all to see(!)"

applause!

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2008-03-24 07:37 PM

IWIHWT..........Yes, I do. Nice, so soft
but so certain.

Alison

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10 posted 2008-03-25 01:49 AM

So lovely, Roniece.
Beautiful.

Ali

JamesMichael
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11 posted 2008-03-25 05:41 AM

"And memories are made of moments."...Very nice...James

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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12 posted 2008-03-25 06:41 AM

Thank you... you are all so lovely and warm with your comments to my work... love RDB

and yes, I know Bobby, I have to work on my needless 'ands'!!

I do love you for pointing them out to me always!

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

[This message has been edited by Roniece Dawson-Bruce (03-25-2008 07:33 AM).]

simon
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13 posted 2008-03-25 07:50 AM

Roniece,
this is so sweet...
Enjoyed...!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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14 posted 2008-03-25 07:56 AM

thank you lovely Simon!

RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

effjayel
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At the Crossroads of Infinity

15 posted 2008-03-25 10:06 AM

RDB,

And I read this 2 or 3 times
And after the 4th time I thought
And this is yet another reason I enjoy this site so much
And that's all I want to say really, except
I'd like to give you a big 'and for writing this simple, yet deep and meaningful piece...

Andy...sorry, John

Margherita
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Eternity

16 posted 2008-03-25 12:43 PM

Your dialogue comes across with the right dose of tenderness and determination, dear Roniece.

What a smile can do!

Very well done!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Rick
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Victoria, Australia

17 posted 2008-03-25 02:35 PM

and then you smiled and the soon was kept for later….

Just loved this line Roniece and all that came before. Have a wonderful day my friend.

Rick

Honeybunch
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South Africa

18 posted 2008-03-25 03:59 PM

Loved this, Roniece, so ditto to the other comments.

Helen

Brian23
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19 posted 2008-03-25 06:43 PM

Nice, eloquent and simply put a little joy to read

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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20 posted 2008-03-25 07:17 PM

John... you made me laugh! thank you x

Margharita ...lovely Margharita, thank you too

Rick... thanks my friend

Helen... Hello lovely, thanks for your comment

Brian... thank you for leaving a comment on my work, I appreciate you...

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

icebox
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in the shadows

21 posted 2008-03-25 09:08 PM

"no-one lives forever
and memories are made of moments"

Words more true have never been written.

A great write!

A human smile is a great thing. I don't see many smiles; my family frequently tell me my appearance most often frightens people. Because of old damage, when I smile it rarely reaches the outside. Maybe that is why I value an honest smile. Your poem made me smile. Thanks.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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Sydney, Australia

22 posted 2008-03-25 09:41 PM

ah Mr Ice, I would love to smile your days every day if I could... your writings are just so beautiful I do so enjoy your work...

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

sewasham
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Oklahoma, USA

23 posted 2008-03-25 11:58 PM

Very nice Ronnie. Take care and Have fun. Steve

LindsayP
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Australia, Victoria

24 posted 2008-03-26 11:04 PM

no-one lives forever
and memories are made of moments
that count for all to see

Short but very sweet Roniece,
A few words told a lot.
Love to you dear friend.

Lindsay

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

25 posted 2008-03-27 01:51 PM

As long as the later becomes sooner soon enough, Ronnie...

I smiled with this.

Thank you, dear.

The Lady
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The Southwest

26 posted 2008-03-27 03:51 PM

ahhh Roniece my friend
you left me wanting more

excellent!

Martie

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27 posted 2008-04-11 10:58 AM

Roniece.......This moment is even more special because you recognize that it is all that you have. A wonderful and wise poem!

Oklahoma Rose
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Oklahoma USA

28 posted 2008-04-11 11:02 AM

I love the way you wrote this, Roniece. Beautiful!

Larrysmom
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since 2008-04-03

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Florida, USA

29 posted 2008-04-12 05:34 PM

RDB,

WOW! Your poetry never ceases to amaze me… So gorgeous and so much felt with so few words… WOW!

Tammy<333

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

30 posted 2008-04-13 06:50 AM

thank you each and everyone of you who have graced me with a response... I truly appreciate you all... love RDB x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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