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Open Poetry #42

mad vision

surrealpoetics
Junior Member

since 2008-01-13

Posts 13
Spokane, Washington

0 posted 2008-03-21 08:48 AM

"mad vision"
it should be noted that this work was done in a "first thought/last thought" mode, it is written via pure instinct and without revision or pause to think it through.
enjoy...

the bursting nebular birth
shatters the even sky ~
the music of the spheres
toning in minor key,
a disarray
of heavenly bodies ~
rogue stars
menacing the dusk.

distant luminaries undulate
like disembodied forms
of a hidden prism ~
transitory images
of stenciled ghost ships
adrift
on the electrum ocean.

the ashen mist
of self-apocalyptic cities
enshroud the decadence ~
where roses burst
in dark spheres
set apart
for the doomsday
machinery
of love.

the muse has fallen!
her diaphanous wings
perforated
by streaming vapours
of meteor contemplation.

the echoing sound
splinters the stars ~
abysmal
in the creativity
of the endless chasm ~
pushing outward perpetually,
spiralling
out of control…

what elegance is there
that permeates
in deaf’ning resound
of heart-ache?

into the abyss ~
the vision
is mere shadow puppetry
on the screen
of neurosis.

so i wore this mask
of death ~
musing haunted
forthcoming silence ~
evasive contemplation,
wandering thoughts of stillness
formulating
mad words
for mad verse.

~John Waldron~

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
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1 posted 2008-03-22 07:29 PM

Much interesting imaging here!:

I am particularly fond of the beginning:

“The bursting nebular birth
shatters the even sky ~
the music of the spheres
toning in minor key,
a disarray
of heavenly bodies ~
rogue stars
menacing the dusk.”

[it reminds me of:
  “…wounded galaxies
    tapping at your window panes
    the empty mirrors of tomorrow’s
      absurdity
    reflect the tortured, straining lobes
      of crystal hallucination
    that taunt the naked mind”  ]

AND also fine:

“the ashen mist
of self-apocalyptic cities”;

“…echoing sound
splinters the stars …
in the creativity
of the endless chasm”

Lots of potential!

Applause!!

p.s.: fine choice of 'P.I.P.-land' UserName
       (ID) as well!

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