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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-03-21 05:59 AM



we never had been there before
at least we didn't remember
not to the degree we did then
when we were accidentally taken

and you told me of your urges
that kept you awake some days
until you took them in hand
and put them in the dream tree

I showed you my collection too
of hand prints on wanting things
just inches away from silver bullets
with remote control attachments

we smiled some mornings more slowly
with voices we danced in thorn trees
and sipped drive through willings
like my whiskey and your liquor

while just praying for whirlwinds


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daark



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Margherita
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1 posted 2008-03-21 09:07 AM


quote:
we smiled some mornings more slowly
with voices we danced in thorn trees



With your words you dance everywhere ...

I think you painted an exquisite "alley of sun temptation"!

Love,
Margherita

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with you
2 posted 2008-03-21 03:11 PM


"we never had been there before
at least we didn't remember
not to the degree we did then
when we were accidentally taken

and you told me of your urges
that kept you awake some days
until you took them in hand
and put them in the dream tree"


awesome

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-03-21 04:55 PM


ms mar, thanks to you lady friend


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ms suesea, thanks babe for the touch

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4 posted 2008-03-21 08:54 PM


There's no reply for a poem like this .. there is only awe as I read pure emotion ... yep.

A

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-03-22 04:33 AM


yes, Mr Daark, I'm with Ms Mar on this.. exquisite..   RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2008-03-22 07:18 AM


ms ali-san, thank you little one for the touch.

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ms r & b, thanks for the read ms

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