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vandana
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0 posted 2008-03-19 07:03 PM




Through Times,
Where skies cover with the clouds,
Where love stands forever,
We should allow time of our life,
We should have love,
In our hearts,
I always remember our love,
During years,
Following my heart
To yours,
I will take your hand
I will make the things right,
I will keep watching over you
I will keep loving you
Love will stay forever,
I'll find a path
To yours,
Through times.....




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Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2008-03-19 07:07 PM


Dear Vandana,

I very much like the words and thoughts expressed in this poetic work.

Bobby

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2008-03-19 07:21 PM


Fantastic...James
Alison
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3 posted 2008-03-19 07:45 PM


Dear vandana,

Lovely poetry.

Alison

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4 posted 2008-03-20 11:20 AM


i enjoyed readind your poem  ...and hope reading you again...
   thanks

   yann    

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5 posted 2008-03-20 02:09 PM


Vandana, you have found your niche. Another stunning piece...I wrote that before I saw that it rhymed & now I have, I'm leaving it !
SEA
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6 posted 2008-03-20 10:58 PM


I think this one is my most favorite from you!! Loved this
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7 posted 2008-03-22 10:17 PM



Vandana,

This is a wonderful poem. My only suggestion would be to lose some of the commas, as not all of them are needed. It might make for a better flow of your lovely thoughts.

I'm so very proud of you, for you've come so far in all of your poetry in the years that I have known you.




Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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8 posted 2008-03-23 09:09 AM


beautiful Vandana!  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

nakdthoughts
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9 posted 2008-03-23 11:34 AM


"I'll find a path
To yours,
Through times..... :

beautiful thoughts and poem, Vandana

M

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