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0 posted 2008-03-17 02:09 AM


The river lapped its invitation
against the metal boat side
Lulling me to take a tentative step
into the murky water
My line arched as I cast
to the logs where the Pike hide
Coldness brushed my ankles,
silt tickled between my toes

One small step at a time,
I moved deeper into the slough
As I tried to attract a fish
to take my shiny new red lure
The sun was beaming down hot;
the sky was, oh so, blue
Murky water kissed my shins, knees,
then my hips and waist

Concentrating hard,
I hadn’t noticed the clouds move in
The song of my line sang
like music to my longing soul
I was oblivious to rain drops
that began to saturate my skin
My hair plastered to my cheeks
before I knew I was chilled

No Pike had bitten, but thunder’s voice
was rumbling deeply
I reeled in my line,
then set my pole in the boat with care
My body grew cold as I moved
into the shade of the spruce trees
I trembled as my shirt pressed
wet against me, water dripping

A small campfire crackled cheerfully,
built just to warm me
He had built a little tilted lean-to
covered with moss and sticks
His arms drew me close
and he began to dance slowly, silently
Holding my wet body close
we moved against each other, alone

Our bodies brushed, touched
and teased that day on the slough
No words broke the whisper
as rain fell among canopied branches
Desire broke the chill within me,
spawning need (as desire will do)
Together, and alone, we danced,
crafting magic to linger on

---

Alison

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2008-03-17 02:27 AM


Yummm...James
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2 posted 2008-03-17 05:57 AM


ms ali-san...you have been busy..fishing
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3 posted 2008-03-17 06:05 AM


Nicely done A.  Precious days on the banks, how beautiful.
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4 posted 2008-03-17 08:38 AM


Alison,

Very nice work--and people ask why the fish aren’t biting.

Bobby

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5 posted 2008-03-17 08:44 AM


Hate fishing but enjoyed this.
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6 posted 2008-03-17 09:13 AM


IWIHWT I Wish I Had Written That!!! I too, have had a similar fishing experience! Thank you for so vividly bringing it back to me! Sighing, here! ~ and remembering...




Linda

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7 posted 2008-03-17 12:15 PM


Good catch, you got him hook,line & sinker with this one.... J
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8 posted 2008-03-17 03:37 PM


Wonderfully Written Alison!

HAPPY ST.PATRICK'S DAY


ARCTIC WIND

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9 posted 2008-03-18 01:19 AM


James,

Thanks for reading and feeling.

Alison

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10 posted 2008-03-18 01:20 AM


D

Fishing is a great way to spend time.  Agree?

A

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11 posted 2008-03-18 01:21 AM


Donna,

Thank you for smiling with me.

A

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12 posted 2008-03-18 01:22 AM


Bobby,

I love to cast.  Biting is always good too and catching is thrilling, but I can just stand in the water and cast all day.

Alison

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13 posted 2008-03-18 01:27 AM


Simon,

Fishing .. is so much more than just fishing to me.

Alison

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14 posted 2008-03-18 01:29 AM


Linda,

Thank you so much.  I almost dropped this one in to the trash .. but, I decided to see what my PiP friends had to say first.  Thank you.

xoxoxo
Alison

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John,

You made me smile - you have that way about you .. that makes me smile and I like that about you.

Thank you,
A

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16 posted 2008-03-18 01:31 AM


AW,

Thank you so much.  You are appreciated.

A

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